[Essay] fund me

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Ashiuhto

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Please help me correct the following paragraph. Thanks!
In the future, I plan to study in the UK. However, studying abroad takes a great amount of money which I can’t afford. Therefore, I hope somebody will fund / patronize me to support my studying. Moreover, my ambition is to become a dentist or a forensic scientist. Let’s wait and see whether I will reach my goal 15 years later.
 

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Please help me correct the following paragraph. Thanks!
In the future, I plan to study in the UK. However, studying abroad takes a [STRIKE]great[/STRIKE] large amount of money which, at the moment, I [STRIKE]can’t afford[/STRIKE] don't have. Therefore, I hope somebody will fund/patronize me to support my [STRIKE]studying[/STRIKE] studies. [STRIKE]Moreover,[/STRIKE] My ambition is to become a dentist or a forensic scientist. Let’s wait and see whether I [STRIKE]will[/STRIKE] reach my goal in 15 years' time. [STRIKE]later. [/STRIKE]

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