ediblegrammar
Member
- Joined
- Jan 30, 2011
- Member Type
- Student or Learner
- Native Language
- Malay
- Home Country
- Malaysia
- Current Location
- Malaysia
Hi,
I'm sorry if it's not appropriate to post this in here. But I really need your help, and hopefully others could benefit from this too. I need to send the letter out on Monday actually.
I just wrote a letter requesting for sponsorhips. I would be grateful if you could check it for me. I know there are grammatical errors somewhere. Or perhaps you have better ideas to make it more interesting and convincing. Sorry I have to hide some details.
Thank you so much for your help.
<---Letter starts here--->
Dear Sir,
SPONSORSHIP FOR STORYTELLING COMPETITION
ABC English is a 20-minute radio show that airs on ABC Radio every Saturday at 10:00 a.m. The show consists of 30 episodes where the first episode was aired on 15 January 2011.
The objective of the show is to inculcate interest and passion in learning English, as well as to raise self-confidence to speak English. Our listeners come from different age groups and various backgrounds, from students to adults.
As we believe the young ones could benefit most from the show, we are organising a storytelling competition for students. Twelve schools will be invited to take part in the competition where the ones with low achievement in English Language subject will be prioritised. Below are the details of the event:
Date: XX
Venue: XX
Number of Participants: 10 students from various schools
Target Audience: Students, teachers, parents etc.
We are currently seeking financial sponsors. Therefore, we are writing to see if you would be interested in sponsoring the event. Please be informed that this is a non profit-making event. Every financial support and sponsorship we receive will be used completely for the event.
With $500.00 of sponsorship, your company name will be highlighted in announcements (radio, press release and banners), and during the introduction of the event itself. The competition will also be recorded live by ABC Radio and will be aired on ABC English.
If you need more information, please feel free to contact [Name] at [Phone No.] or [Emel].
An early reply would be appreciated as we will be making announcements and promotions very soon. We look forward to mentioning your name in all of our announcements and promotions.
Thank you in advance for your consideration and support.
Yours Sincerely,
..
<---Letter ends here--->
I'm sorry if it's not appropriate to post this in here. But I really need your help, and hopefully others could benefit from this too. I need to send the letter out on Monday actually.
I just wrote a letter requesting for sponsorhips. I would be grateful if you could check it for me. I know there are grammatical errors somewhere. Or perhaps you have better ideas to make it more interesting and convincing. Sorry I have to hide some details.
Thank you so much for your help.
<---Letter starts here--->
Dear Sir,
SPONSORSHIP FOR STORYTELLING COMPETITION
ABC English is a 20-minute radio show that airs on ABC Radio every Saturday at 10:00 a.m. The show consists of 30 episodes where the first episode was aired on 15 January 2011.
The objective of the show is to inculcate interest and passion in learning English, as well as to raise self-confidence to speak English. Our listeners come from different age groups and various backgrounds, from students to adults.
As we believe the young ones could benefit most from the show, we are organising a storytelling competition for students. Twelve schools will be invited to take part in the competition where the ones with low achievement in English Language subject will be prioritised. Below are the details of the event:
Date: XX
Venue: XX
Number of Participants: 10 students from various schools
Target Audience: Students, teachers, parents etc.
We are currently seeking financial sponsors. Therefore, we are writing to see if you would be interested in sponsoring the event. Please be informed that this is a non profit-making event. Every financial support and sponsorship we receive will be used completely for the event.
With $500.00 of sponsorship, your company name will be highlighted in announcements (radio, press release and banners), and during the introduction of the event itself. The competition will also be recorded live by ABC Radio and will be aired on ABC English.
If you need more information, please feel free to contact [Name] at [Phone No.] or [Emel].
An early reply would be appreciated as we will be making announcements and promotions very soon. We look forward to mentioning your name in all of our announcements and promotions.
Thank you in advance for your consideration and support.
Yours Sincerely,
..
<---Letter ends here--->