If that is what you see, then there is nothing wrong with waffling about the garden, but make sure you keep to either first or second person narrative. You also start with Looking out my window, you can see vivid colours, spectacular shapes, and compelling sights", but your text does not seem to fill out these. What are the "compelling sights"?
As to your question about the "Current Location" in personal details, you will notice how many of our members come from one country and are living/working in another. It can help to know this. Also, at 14 you are really a student rather an an academic.