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    Default how should I modify this sentence?

    Dear teachers,
    Today I met one English question:
    Emphasize the part which should have been stressed.
    one sentence follows like this:
    *There are few mistakes in the language of the composition, but it is not very good, because the content is not interesting.
    I think the sentence wants to stress "but it is not very good".
    I changed the sentence like this :
    *There are few mistakes in the language of the composition, but the content is not interesting, so it is not very good.
    I think I put "it is not very good" at the end of the sentence, it is more stressed now, but I am not sure.

    your help is looked forward to.

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    Exclamation Re: how should I modify this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by japanjapan View Post
    Dear teachers,
    Today I met one English question:
    Emphasize the part which should have been stressed.
    one sentence follows like this:
    *There are few mistakes in the language of the composition, but it is not very good, because the content is not interesting.
    I think the sentence wants to stress "but it is not very good".
    I changed the sentence like this :
    *There are few mistakes in the language of the composition, but the content is not interesting, so it is not very good.
    I think I put "it is not very good" at the end of the sentence, it is more stressed now, but I am not sure.

    your help is looked forward to.
    You are right. Here "it" stands for the language of the composition which is not very good. The composition may be poetry, drama, essay or prose. If it is a drama the dialog should be excellant which means languge must be very good. So it is the laguage which need to be stressed. However I like to modify the sentence as under:
    There are few mistakes in the language of the composition, and the content not being interesting, so it is not very good.

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    Default Re: how should I modify this sentence?

    In the original sentence:
    *There are few mistakes in the language of the composition, but it is not very good, because the content is not interesting.

    ..."it" refers to the composition. In the composition, the grammar is good -"there are few mistakes in the language"...

    ...the contrast, then, is with the content - the subject matter and how it is expressed/phrased - so that you are correct: it would be better to write the sentence as:
    There are few mistakes in the language of the composition, but the content is not interesting...
    ...and then the overall, final judgment of the sentence:
    ...so it is not very good.

    What I don't know, is how to answer:
    Emphasize the part which should have been stressed.
    All three parts have equal importance to my mind.
    Anyone else help there? ***

    (Also, I would have written;
    Emphasize the part which that should have been stressed.)

    ***Some further thoughts:
    Take the sentence...
    "He seems a very likeable person, but I despise him. He scammed old people out of their life savings."
    Here, 'but I despise him' comes second in the sentence, and so the contrast being emphasized is between how he seems to others/their opinion of him, and my opinion of him. Then the third part - 'he scammed...' gives my reason for despising him.
    Changing the order of the parts:
    "He seems a very likeable person, but he scammed old people out of their life savings, so I despise him."
    Here, the contrast emphasized is between how he seems, and how he behaves, his actions/deeds:'...but he scammed.' Then I add my personal opinion: '...so I despise him.'
    Last edited by David L.; 19-Jul-2009 at 07:37.

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    Default Re: how should I modify this sentence?

    Quote Originally Posted by sarat_106 View Post
    There are few mistakes in the language of the composition, and the content not being interesting, so it is not very good.
    There are several problems with this.
    The fact that there are few problems with the language is a good thing, so you need "but" not "and".
    If you want to add "being", you need to delete "so".
    There are few mistakes in the language of the composition, but the content not being interesting, so it is not very good.
    Even so the "it" in "it is not very good" would tend to refer to 'content'.
    I prefer the original.

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