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    can u correct my formal letter to the principal

    the principal
    abc school
    india

    dear ms.xyz
    this is to draw your kind attention to the fact that my ward,lmn,studying in your prestigious institution will be travelling abroad with me from 1st august 2009 to 15th october 2009,as me and my husband have to attend some important piece of work in brazil.
    i will be really grateful to you if u grant him appropriate holidays
    Thanks and regards

    yours faithfully
    signature
    (mother of lmn)

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    Re: can u correct my formal letter to the principal

    can u correct my formal letter to the principal
    Hello,
    since yours is a formal letter, the blue words should be capitalised to match your formal tone.

    I'm not sure about the word "ward" - is it the same as "son"? The red "me" should read "I". "Attent an important meeting" or "conduct an important assignment". u should be you.

    Be careful the the spacing between paragraphs.

    Good luck



    the principal
    abc school
    india

    dear ms.xyz


    this is to draw your kind attention to the fact that my ward,lmn,studying in your prestigious institution will be travelling abroad with me from 1st august 2009 to 15th october 2009,as me and my husband have to attend some important piece of work in brazil.

    i will be really grateful to you if u grant him appropriate holidays

    Thanks and regards

    yours faithfully
    signature
    (mother of lmn)

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