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    Angry PLEASE EDIT "HOSPITALITY" PARAGRAPH

    "Hospitality"

    A table is set along with cooked rice, dish of rice with chopped meat, vegetable, and spices. Chickens were prepared in the middle of the table. China dishes, forks and spoons were shining under the lights. The salad was dressed by circles of tomato and cucumber, and the orange color of carrot made the table more tempting. The first offering by host started and the guests began having dinner. Glasses were filled with cool drinks in which sheets of ice were dancing. The guests had been eating food and drinking beverage every other one. Nobody was able to catch up with the guests' speed in this eating race. The more time passed the more pieces of poor Chickens removed. Now that was a time for having ice cream as a dessert which covered by a lump of cocoa cream as well as two cherries on. No sooner had the guests their ice cream than bowls of dried nuts came up before their eyes. Their eyes got almond like and lips twisted. While the first pistachio opened, the last dessert prepared- cups of tea with a bunch of cookies. The stomach is the organ inside one's body where food is digest was going to burst up but felt ashamed and waited untill getting home.

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    Exclamation Re: PLEASE EDIT "HOSPITALITY" PARAGRAPH

    Quote Originally Posted by taghavi View Post
    "Hospitality"

    A table is set along with cooked rice, dish of rice with chopped meat, vegetable, and spices. Pieces of spicy chickens were placed/prepared in the middle of the table. China dishes, forks and spoons were shining under the lights. The salad (was) dressed by circles of tomato and cucumber, and the orange color of carrot made the table look more tempting. The first offering by host started and the guests began having dinner. Glasses were filled with cool drinks in which tiny pieces (sheets) of ice were dancing. The guests continued (had been) eating food and drinking beverage while competing with each (every) other (one). Nobody was able to catch up with the guests' speed in this eating race. As time passed by (The more time passed the) more and more pieces of spicy (poor) Chickens removed. Then came the (Now that was a) time for having ice cream (as a) dessert which was covered by a lump of cocoa cream as well as two cherries on it. No sooner (had) the guests finished their ice cream than bowls of dried nuts offered (came up) before their eyes. The sight made their eyes got almond like and lips twisted. When (While) the first pistachio opened, the last dessert prepared- Then cups of tea with a bunch of cookies were served. Evry one ate so much that their (The) stomach (is the organ inside one's body) where food is digested, appeared as if was going to burst (up but). So they felt ashamed and waited until getting back home.
    Delete the words underlined in brackets
    Last edited by sarat_106; 30-Jul-2009 at 07:02.

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