Delete words in brackets. I would rate this as good.Topic: Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Advertising is a business of making money by introducing and encouraging people to buy new products or use services. Whether it is good or bad depends on its content and influence which can have a positive or harmful effect on the society (the aims of manufacturers).
In the first place, advertising is good because it tells us about new products. I cannot go shopping everyday so I watch television, read newspaper to have information about new products and their comparative merits over similar existing products in the market. . In this case, advertising is helpful because both buyers and sellers are (have) benefited. Buyers can have a choice to buy better (enjoy the) products and deserving sellers/manufacturersincrease their sales (have money).
Moreover, advertising can be (is) interesting and inovative. So it attracts not only adults but also children. For example, in the advertisement of milk, there are both imagination and music. The screen shot (imagine) of milking cows singing the song “so happy together” impresses many people. Children have fun and insist their parents to buy this kind of milk. So can't (why don’t) we think advertising as (is) one kind of entertainment?
In the second place, some people feel that(find) they are being cheated when persuasive advertising urges them to buy things they really do not need. With the use of advanced (modern) technique, there are many unnecessary and bad but attractive (counterfeit products) products available. For example, the advertising of soft drink urges us to buy it. But when we drink, contrary to the advertisement, it has no effect but on the other hand it can (or) may harm our health. So before buying a product we should consider whether it is good or bad.
To sum up, advertising has both advantages and disadvantages. But I am sure that it is growing very fast in contemporary society. Advertising promotes a product or service . Also it encourages economy to develop. We could say it is a necessary evil and a part and parcel of (liar in) our lives.
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