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    Post Please correct the paragraph says that swine flu!

    July 24th 2009, World Health Organization informed "Begin to the swine flu was detected in four months ago, the A/H1N1 flu virus has been spreading to many countries on the world. At this time, this dead-virus was presented at 160 in sum of 193 member countries of WHO and killed approximately 800 people ." Speaking at the Geneva meeting (Switzeland), the WHO's spokesman - Gregory Hartl showed that it was even no sign to prove the H1N1 virus changed the way of operation and even though the infection of it was more and more quick, the things that the world were seeing was just the spreading of geography in the countries.
    According to WHO, with this infection speed, the H1N1 virus would present at all of countries on the world. The area that WHO pay the most attention was the countries that began epidemic diseases (as: Mexico, USA, Canada) and the Northern countries, when this region was coming Autumn, it was an advantage for the developing of H1N1. July 24th The central preventing and controlling epidemic diseases of America informed 20 - 40% USA population had the infected risk in the next 2 years, more than the normal flu season 2 times. The American Health officials showed that decreasing forecast level just happen when the vaccine injection campaign or the against flu campaign was performed actively and effectively. Otherwise, In the next 2 years, the number of people were died by H1N1 could be 90.000 people, might be thousands people if the against flu campaign didn't have effect.
    Now according to the vaccine injection campaign, WHO informed the first vaccine products was readied to give the Northern Countries to keep track of the flu epidemic in this Autumn. WHO promised now had enough 100M vaccine doses to provide for the developing countries which had the lack of health system. WHO also negotiated with the different pharmaceutical corporation on the world to continued developing the preventing flu vaccine./.

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    Default Re: Please correct the paragraph says that swine flu!

    Quote Originally Posted by hai_lua_t2 View Post
    July 24th 2009, the World Health Organization advised "Begin to Since the swine flu was detected in four months ago, the A/H1N1 flu virus has been spread to many countries on in the world. At this time, this dead- [?] virus was presented at is present in 160 in sum of of the 193 member countries of WHO and has killed approximately 800 people ."
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    Speaking at the Geneva meeting (Switzerland), the WHO's spokesman - Gregory Hartl showed that it was even no sign to prove the H1N1 virus changed the way of operation and even though the infection of it was more and more quick, the things that the world were seeing was just the spreading of geography in the countries.
    I'm not sure what Mr Hartl is trying to say here.

    According to WHO, with this infection speed, the H1N1 virus would present at all of countries on the world. The area that WHO pay the most attention was the countries that began epidemic diseases (as: Mexico, USA, Canada) and the Northern countries, when this region was coming Autumn, it was an advantage for the developing of H1N1. July 24th The central preventing and controlling epidemic diseases of America informed 20 - 40% USA population had the infected risk in the next 2 years, more than the normal flu season 2 times. The American Health officials showed that decreasing forecast level just happen when the vaccine injection campaign or the against flu campaign was performed actively and effectively. Otherwise, In the next 2 years, the number of people were died by H1N1 could be 90.000 people, might be thousands people if the against flu campaign didn't have effect.
    Now according to the vaccine injection campaign, WHO informed the first vaccine products was readied to give the Northern Countries to keep track of the flu epidemic in this Autumn. WHO promised now had enough 100M vaccine doses to provide for the developing countries which had the lack of health system. WHO also negotiated with the different pharmaceutical corporation on the world to continued developing the preventing flu vaccine./.
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    Default Re: Please correct the paragraph says that swine flu!

    Quote Originally Posted by Raymott View Post
    I'm not sure what Mr Hartl is trying to say here.
    This is an article which was written by Vietnamese that I took it on Internet. Then I translated into English and certainly Mr Hartl didn't say that!
    Please help me correct all of message! Thanks a lot!

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    Default Re: Please correct the paragraph says that swine flu!

    Quote Originally Posted by hai_lua_t2 View Post
    This is an article which was written by Vietnamese that I took it on Internet. Then I translated into English and certainly Mr Hartl didn't say that!
    Please help me correct all of message! Thanks a lot!
    Sorry, there are too many places where I don't know what you're trying to say. Perhaps a translation like that is overambitious at this stage?

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    Default Re: Please correct the paragraph says that swine flu!

    Quote Originally Posted by hai_lua_t2 View Post
    Then I translated into English and certainly Mr Hartl didn't say that!
    You are translating more specialised English, so a cross reference is helpful from a page written in English on the same subject. This link will give a written English version similar to your original text (if the moderators will allow this, since it's appropriate to the nature of your question.)
    France 24 | Virus has spread to almost every country, says WHO | France 24

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    Default Re: Please correct the paragraph says that swine flu!

    Yeah! I think this is the original paragraph says that swine flu that I translated.
    What I mean is, you correct my grammatical errors and word choices in my passage...

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