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    In the article “Celebrating Christmas in Sandy” by Tyance Fiddler says that

    Celebrating Christmas in Sandy Lake was the greatest and funniest idea. Especially with a lot to see and activities going on, such as beautiful sights, skidoo train, gunshots. Also, the other fun part of this holiday, it is whole week celebration not just two days holiday. It was the best Christmas because most of the relatives were there as well to celebrate. In additional to that, she has kept her mix of Spiritual and Christianity beliefs from great grandparents to remember all the spirits during Christmas time, by collecting sweats and fruits. In conclusion they had fantastic time celebrating New Year as well spent time with family and opening gifts. As the results she had good time and she is open for more Christmas to come to go back.

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    Quote Originally Posted by lindalinda1228 View Post
    In the article “Celebrating Christmas in Sandy” by Tyance Fiddler says that

    Celebrating Christmas in Sandy Lake was the greatest and funniest idea, especially when one can see (with) a lot of (and) activities going on, such as beautiful sights, skidoo train, gunshots. There is also the other part of this holiday fun, for it is a whole week celebration not just two days holiday. It was the best Christmas because most of the relatives came (were) there (as well) to celebrate. In additional to that, she has kept her mix of Spiritual and Christianity beliefs from great grandparents to remember all of them (the spirits) during Christmas time, while at the same time (by) collecting sweats and fruits. In conclusion they had fantastic time celebrating the New Year as well as spending time with family and exchanging (opening) gifts. Consequently, (As the results) she had a good time and she is open for more Christmas to come and (to) go (back).
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