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    Hello, I need help in fixing my Thesis Statement in my argumentative essay. My teacher said my essay has no Thesis statement. It's not strong enough to argue. I want to state that " exercsing is better taking diet supplementary" ...Any suggestion with this? . I have no idea to fix now. Need help please. Thank you in advance.

    Here are an introductory part of my essay



    ........As a result, most people choose to lose their weight by using those dietary products for rapid outcomes instead of doing exercise and balancing diet. But the truth is that not everything people are told in advertisements can give someone perfect results. Most usually turn to the “lose weight fast” but suffer from side effects or sometimes those products unfortunately cause them to death. Although dietary supplements are very popular because they are fast and convenient, actually, people should consider regular exercise and balance their diet in order to be healthier and have the most effective way of weight loss.

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    Re: Need help in editing Thesis statement

    Hello amyjung

    You need to say this in your introduction:

    • exercising is better taking diet supplementary

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