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    Hello,

    I could use some proof-reading with this sentence:

    "Work experience is very important for Finnish students and what I have learned from work,is that usability is still more or less overlooked"

    The part in bold is something I'm not quite sure about.. I feel that it should be smoother somehow.

    Thanks in advance

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    Quote Originally Posted by larpa View Post
    Hello,

    I could use some proof-reading with this sentence:

    "Work experience is very important for Finnish students and what little/mostly/clearly I have learned from work,is that usability is still more or less overlooked"

    The part in bold is something I'm not quite sure about.. I feel that it should be smoother somehow.

    Thanks in advance
    Use an adverb as suggested. Perhaps it sounds better

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    Thanks for the tips.

    Hmm, could it be something like "and from work I have learned.." or "and via work.."? Or are those incorrect? I am trying to say something like that work experience has taught me that usability is still etc. but I don't want to repeat the term 'work experience'
    Last edited by larpa; 08-Aug-2009 at 10:38.

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    Default Re: One sentence

    Quote Originally Posted by larpa View Post
    Hello,

    I could use some proof-reading with this sentence:

    "Work experience is very important for Finnish students and what I have learned from work,is that usability is still more or less overlooked"

    The part in bold is something I'm not quite sure about.. I feel that it should be smoother somehow.

    Thanks in advance
    "Work experience is very important for Finnish students and I have learned, from my experience of working, that usability is still more or less overlooked"

    I think perhaps the above is an improvement, though the original is ok.

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