Another question you may consider is whether or not money truly means success. And, does more money bring happiness? Not to mention the fact that many within a particular quadrant may not want to move into another quadrant.
There's a significant difference between your introductory and summary paragraph and your body paragraphs. The introduction and summary reveal your weaknesses with the English language. The body paragraphs evidence your mimicking written text from somewhere else. Your level of language must be consistent throughout your essay.
Writing consists of re-writing and more re-writing. Go back and rewrite again taking my advice into consideration. Resubmit and let's see where you are.
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