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    Default Please correct the email ( grammar)

    Could you please correct the email. I has so many grammar mistakes as well. i want to make it a bit professional but it's not. Please help!!


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    Thanks for your email. The traing was quite good and the teaching quility was good as well.
    I would like to point a few things which i find a bit unprofessional.

    The training was started one day late that was okay because that was informed to us before only but it never started on time and there were so many interuptions in between while training.
    secondly the training was finished 3 days late which was quite annoying for me because i was tarvelling from birmingham everyday.
    despite these the training was good.

    It would be highly appreciated if you could send me a few SAP HR resumes so that i can update my cv accordingly, it will be a great help.

    I am planning to take the exam probably next month or in october but i will inform you in advance because i need to take the preparation tests as well before that.

    I have attached the feedback form as well.

    Thanks again,
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    Thanks,

    Sarah.

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    Default Re: Please correct the email ( grammar)

    Quote Originally Posted by ghgh View Post
    Could you please correct the email. I has so many grammar mistakes as well. i want to make it a bit professional but it's not. Please help!!
    Thank you for your email.

    Whilst both the training and teaching quality were good I would like to mention a few things which I found somewhat unprofessional.

    Even though I was told the training would start one day later than originally planned, it still did not start on time. There were many interruptions during the course and it finished three days late.

    You will appreciate that because I was travelling from Birmingham each day this was a considerable inconvenience.

    I am planning to take the exam either next month or in October but I will give you notice since I need to take the preparation tests.

    I would appreciate it if you could send me a few HR SAP resumes so that I can update my CV.

    I am attaching the feedback form as requested.

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