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    Default what is the level of writing skill in these passages?

    Hi please check the below passages and give some comment. Thank you.


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    I am the Applicant Jack Green, born on 9 June 1986. I received the voluntary departure notice from Citizen and Immigration Canada on May 5 this year, and I left for China on May 23. I did not purposely violate the law in Canada, neither did I work illegally during my stay there. The failure of renewing my study permit is due to my ignorance of such an important matter. This is a once-in-a-lifetime lesson for me and I bitterly regret my neglect and can not stop blaming myself for the troubles and worries I have caused to my parents.

    Now I apply for a re-entry visa to Canada in hope that I will be able to resume my study in University of XXX. Whether I will be able to return to Canada and finish the remaining one and half years’ study is of vital importance to my future. I sincerely request your patience to go over this letter, in which I will try to explain why I failed to renew my study permit, my activities around its expiry date, my study plans in University of XXX, my family’s financial ability, and my future career options in China.

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    Smile Re: what is the level of writing skill in these passages?

    Not any comment. Pls do me a favor. Thank you.

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    Default Re: what is the level of writing skill in these passages?

    Quote Originally Posted by victor su View Post
    Not any comment. Pls do me a favor. Thank you.
    I'd say upper intermediate, if that's what you want.
    It conveys the meaning well, which is the main point of the letter.

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    Quote Originally Posted by victor su View Post
    Not any comment. Pls do me a favor. Thank you.
    I think you should not seek to have its slight irregularities straightened out by native English speakers.

    Not only is it perfectly fine in the way it expresses your thoughts, it has the added charm of being your own original composition, not processed by an editor.

    I think it carries all the more positive emotional impact for that reason.

    You don't NEED to change anything, because it expresses your ideas. And I think you SHOULDN'T change anything -- on the grounds that making it into some routine item of writing will diminish its appealing qualities.

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    Smile Re: what is the level of writing skill in these passages?

    Quote Originally Posted by Ann1977 View Post
    I think you should not seek to have its slight irregularities straightened out by native English speakers.

    Not only is it perfectly fine in the way it expresses your thoughts, it has the added charm of being your own original composition, not processed by an editor.

    I think it carries all the more positive emotional impact for that reason.

    You don't NEED to change anything, because it expresses your ideas. And I think you SHOULDN'T change anything -- on the grounds that making it into some routine item of writing will diminish its appealing qualities.

    Thank you for all your comments.
    What I am encounting now is that the more I read what I have written the more suspicious I am getting. Many times I am not certain if it sounds natural or not, which is totally different from when I am wrting with my native language.

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