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    "An aspect of justice in the sense and external organs"

    Justice is placed in my eyes in order to see one path at the same time. That is, one eye cannot look at the left of something and the other one dose it the right of that at the same time. Justice exists in my both ears- left and right- to listen one or more utterances both at the same time; if I hear the sound of a song with one ear, the other one wouldn't receive that sound after an hour. Justice has been set in two openings of my nose, which smell only an odour at the same time as well. Justice is also situated in my hands while one picks something up and another holds it. Another role of justice found in my feet that they both move forward or backward together simultaneously. My body is still in harmony with justice, in other words, I unconsciously move the body forward where justice rules!

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    #2

    Re: Could someone please comment on my paragraph?

    Your paragraph is nice.

    One thing:

    It is DOES not DOSE -- end of second line.

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    Thanks for pointing out "does".

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    #4

    Re: Could someone please comment on my paragraph?

    Quote Originally Posted by taghavi View Post
    "An aspect of justice in the sense and external organs"

    Justice is placed in my eyes in order to see one path at the same time.
    ... one path at a time. You can't do "one thing at the same time" - the same time as what? You can do more than one thing at the same time.

    That is, one eye cannot look at the left of something and the other one dose it the right of that at the same time.
    One eye cannot look to the left of something while the other eye looks to the right.
    (You don't need "at the same time "- it's implied in 'while')

    Justice exists in my both ears - left and right - to listen to one or more utterances both at the same time; if I hear the sound of a song with one ear, the other one wouldn't receive that sound after an hour.
    It's unclear whether you saying that you should listen to more than one utterance at once or whether you shouldn't.from this sentence - although, from the context, you obviously mean you shouldn't.

    Justice has been set in two openings of my nose, which smell only
    anone odour the same time at a time as well.
    Justice is also situated in my hands while one picks something up and another holds it. Another role of justice found in my feet is that they both move forward or backward
    together simultaneously.
    Only if you're jumping like a kangaroo Otherwise, they'd be moving forward alternately, one after the other, the way people normally walk.
    It's hard to make a case that both your feet do the same thing at the same time.
    My body is still in harmony with justice; in other words, I unconsciously move
    the my body forward where justice rules!
    You do one thing at a time. "I can only do one thing at a time!"
    You do two or more things at the same time.

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    Wow, what silly mistakes I made!!!!!!!!!!
    Thanks alot for editing
    Yes you are right. "alternately"
    I made this mistake at a time and made those mistakes at the same time. and my passage was so hilarious that you couldn't stop laghing.!

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    Quote Originally Posted by taghavi View Post
    Wow, what silly mistakes I made!!!!!!!!!!
    Thanks alot for editing
    Yes you are right. "alternately"
    I made this mistake at a time and made those mistakes at the same time. and my passage was so hilarious that you couldn't stop laghing.!
    You make one mistake at a time, or this mistake at one time. There has to be a "one" in there.
    Otherwise, yes.
    No, I wasn't laughing. Well, not much
    Seriously though, every learner (and teacher) on this site makes mistakes. When I'm looking for comedy, this isn't where I usually think of.

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    Interesting! Now I learned a lot. Thank you so much.
    You are a patient, good-tempered person. I think that most people here or outside like you. I do too! I also guess you are easy-going. Tell me "you bet"!

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    Quote Originally Posted by taghavi View Post
    Interesting! Now I learned a lot. Thank you so much.
    You are a patient, good-tempered person. I think that most people here or outside like you. I do too! I also guess you are easy-going. Tell me "you bet"!
    Thank you. I'm not sure everyone would agree, but I'm happy that you think that way.

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    #9

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    You're welcome,

    Any way, Don't you like to edit "a strange icon" that I've posted a couple of days ago?

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