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    Topic: “ Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.” You should write at least 300 words.

    When we look back to the history of human being in recent 200 years, we will be surprising what a huge change modern technology has brought us. Trains and planes enable us to travel to everywhere we want. Internet and televisions communicate news to everyone. New technologies provide us a new standard of living, and I state that they are creating a single world culture.

    Modern technology has shortened the distance between cultures, and made the world smaller. People can travel or migrate from one place to another very quickly. They see how people in other zones dress, speak and behave. The more exposure to other traditions and customs they do, the more likely they adopt to those. As a result, their own traditions and customs are replaced by a massive one.

    Another reason for the impact of modern technology on creating a similar world is that it makes possible for cultures to communicate with each other. When watching TV programmes, searching web and chatting through the Internet, people learn about foreign cultures and try to make some of those their own. The exchange of knowledge has had a great impact on their lives. The café from Brazil, the scotch from Scotland, the cigars from Cuba, the wine from France, the American music, that appear and become well-known in many parts of the world are good examples of how modern technology influences people’s life and also creates a single world culture.

    With the rapid development of modern technology, people learn and come to appreciate foreign cultures. They recognize the value of variety. Therefore, in the near future, there will be many similarities in country’s cultures. Traditional cultures around the world may be more willing to join our call for a single world one.

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    Can anyone help me to correct my essay? Thanks a lot in advance. :)
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    Quote Originally Posted by san2612 View Post
    Topic: “ Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.” You should write at least 300 words.

    When we look back at (to) the history of human being in/during the last (recent) 200 years, we will be surpriseed (ing) what a huge/amazing change modern technology has brought us. Trains and planes enable us to travel to everywhere we want. Internet and televisions/mobile phopes help communicate news to everyone. New technologies provide us a new standard of living, and I state that they are creating a single world culture.

    Modern technology has shortened the distance between cultures, and made the world smaller. People can travel or migrate from one place to another very quickly. They see how people in other zones dress, speak and behave. The more exposure to other traditions and customs they have/do, the more likely they adopt (to) those. As a result, their own traditions and customs are replaced comprehessively/by a massive one.

    Another development of (reason for) the impact of modern technology is on creating a similar world (is) that makes it possible for cultures to communicate with each other. When watching TV programs, searching web and chatting through the Internet, people learn about foreign cultures and try to make/adopt some of those as their own. The exchange of knowledge has had a great impact on their lives. The café from Brazil, the scotch from Scotland, the cigars from Cuba, the wine from France, the American music, that appear through different medias (and) become well-known in many parts of the world, are good examples of how modern technology influences people’s life and also creates a single world culture which according to McLuhan functions like a global village..

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    With the rapid development of modern technology, people learn and come to appreciate foreign cultures. They recognize the value of variety. Therefore, in the near future, there will be many similarities in different country’s cultures. Traditional cultures around the world may be more willing to join our call for a single world in the making (one).

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    Delete words in brackets. A few alternate suggestions are made. It is your choice to adopt if those sound good to you. As suggested by konungursvia, the term Global village is incorporated
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    If possible, mention McLuhan.

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    "Traditional cultures around the world may be more willing to join our call for a single world one"
    Are you going to correct this sentence as "Traditional cultures around the world may be more willing to join our call in making a single world one" ?

    Thanks very much, teachers. :)

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    Quote Originally Posted by san2612 View Post
    "Traditional cultures around the world may be more willing to join our call for a single world one"
    Are you going to correct this sentence as "Traditional cultures around the world may be more willing to join our call in making a single world one" ?

    Thanks very much, teachers. :)
    A single world one does not mean any thing, either you can say one single world or a single world in the making. the second expression denotes an ongoing process towards complete integration into one unit, where as in making a single world means the process of integration is going to start.

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