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I strongly argue that physical punishment should be banned everywhere around the world. A child, who experiences physical punishment, is not only experiencing physical punishment can also be affected emotionally. I believe that the practice of hitting a child, teaches them to become hitters themselves. Spanking can be physically damaging, and adults should learn non-violent methods to discipline a child.
I believe that hitting a child can cause violent behavior among kids or adults. I agree that physical punishment exists everywhere around the world, but the severity and kind differs from one country to another.
My experience is a good example; in Africa, where I spent my childhood and teenager life, physical punishment is very common. In any situation, someone like an uncle, aunt, or a neighbor might discipline a child. The consequences due to physical punishment, can be severe, a child might run away from home and stay with friends or relatives. However, they may refuse to take them in. As a result, a child ends up on the street, and becomes a beggar, a thief or can cause violence to others.
In addition, spanking a child can be physically damaging. Physical punishment is the use of physical force with the intention of causing a child to experience pain but not injury. Moreover, some adults have a bad temper, and they lose control while dealing with a child. For instance, they may use their hands, or other objects such as canes, paddles, yardsticks, and belts. For example, I witnessed a child while spanked by his father, because he got two F’s in his mid-term examination.
As consequence, the child had to be hospitalized because the wounds on his back. Africa is a poor continent in contrast to North America, most of the African countries has no rules when it comes to physical punishment. If you are a parent, that gives you the rights to do anything to your child.
In addition, I believe that adults should take the time to judge proper types of punishment for their children. Physical punishment may cause negative impact on a child. A good example could be an impaired parent and child relationship. It can cause fear, anger, and avoidance. For these reasons, a child might end up with stress or depression; might cause them to think about suicide.
Most schools around the world forbid physical punishment except in the third world ‘countries, where stills being practice. I do not think that it is a good idea that teachers punish the physically the students; that may produce anxiety and by consequence can cause them to fail in school.
Turning to physical punishment is not the answer, instead talk persuade, and try to explain your child the difference between right and wrong
In conclusion, I think that physical punishment is wrong. Children should not be punished when they are not behaving in school or at home. However if you must use some kind punishment it should be non-violent form.
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