I think it's written really great, only the sentence "I am a highly motivated person who works hard to accomplish his goal: "his" looks more logical than "my".
Good luck )))
I wish to apply for the position of ‘Java Analyst Programmer / Developer’ as advertised on the web site jobsite.co.uk on the 10th October , 2009.
Having graduated from The University of Northumbria majoring in Software Engineering, I am now working as an IT volunteer at a reputable automotive company. In my current position, I am responsible for design, development and maintenance of the company website. I have also implemented an e-commerce system to the website and the sales have increased 10% compared to the previous two months.
I am a highly motivated person who works hard to accomplish his goal. Also I am detail oriented and able to work under pressure. I want the opportunity to expand
onmy understanding of software development and professional skills in IT. I am keen to learn new technologies and to improve and maintain onmy existing skills.
With my relevant working experience and educational background, I believe I am qualified for the position in your company. Attached, is my resume and I am eagerly awaiting an opportunity to discuss my application further at an interview.