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    Will you correct this, please?

    Hello,
    Here's my text: _________________
    The website of writers in Southern .... where I am with my book I published in ... about.: "My Dream in the South of ..." in 2005. My dream came true when I founded ...

    Blogging: Since I have been sharing "this ... story" in my two blogs, first in ... and then in another language, the museum has made many new friends and new partners...

    ___________________________
    Thank you in advance!

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    Re: Will you correct this, please?

    Quote Originally Posted by englishforgotten View Post
    Hello,
    Here's my text: _________________
    The website of writers in Southern .... where I am with my book I published in ... about.: "My Dream in the South of ..." in 2005. My dream came true when I founded ...

    Blogging: Since I have been sharing "this ... story" in my two blogs, first in ... and then in another language, the museum has made many new friends and new partners...

    ___________________________
    Thank you in advance!
    The website of writers in Southern California, where I am with my book I published in Los Angeles about:: "My Dream in Southern California" in 2005. My dream came true when I founded ...

    If these place name suggestions of mine are appropriate substitutions for the details you want to delete, then I propose:

    The website for writers in Southern California
    -or-
    The website about writers in Southern California
    -------------------------------------------------- (start anew)
    I'm here in Southern California now, after publishing my book
    "My Dream of Southern California" in Los Angeles in 2005.



    The blogging sentence sounds fine.

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    Re: Will you correct this, please?

    Thank you for your help.


    The website of writers in Southern .... where I am with my book I published in one country about.: "My Dream...

    I mean that I am on the list of writers on that website after publishing my book...

    The point is that there with my book I am promoting something...

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    Re: Will you correct this, please?

    Quote Originally Posted by englishforgotten View Post
    Thank you for your help.


    The website of writers in Southern .... where I am with my book I published in one country about.: "My Dream...

    I mean that I am on the list of writers on that website after publishing my book...

    The point is that there with my book I am promoting something...
    Okay. I understand a little more now.

    One problem is the "website OF writers" because "of" doesn't tell much.

    Are you blogging the fact that you have gotten listed on this website ABOUT writers in Southern ____ ?

    If so, does this work --

    The (Actual Name of Website) -- a site for writers in Southern _____ --

    I'm listed there now, after publishing my book "My Dream ....etc"

    I just think it would be better not to try to jam all the information into one hard-to-read sentence. Loosen the information up a little to let the reader in.
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    You're using too much punctuation in front of the name of the book. You don't need a colon ( : ) or a period. At the MOST you could use a comma, like this:

    " . . after publishing my book, "My Dream of ...."

    And I would not even use the comma.

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    Re: Will you correct this, please?

    Thank you again.
    I am blogging the fact that I enjoy writing a lot. And at the same time I am sharing my pastime and promoting my home museum.

    Here's the link - I don't link it directly, but if you put together 'my old bear' as a one word and if you add 'free' and 'fr' in the end, Google shows you my website.
    Then click on the sixth (teddy bear's) step on the left: Our partners and you will find this text you corrected to me.

    Please give me your opinion about the English version.

    englishforgotten - I have forgotten my English because I haven't practiced it for a long time.

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    Re: Will you correct this, please?

    Quote Originally Posted by englishforgotten View Post
    Thank you again.
    I am blogging the fact that I enjoy writing a lot. And at the same time I am sharing my pastime and promoting my home museum.

    Here's the link - I don't link it directly, but if you put together 'my old bear' as a one word and if you add 'free' and 'fr' in the end, Google shows you my website.
    Then click on the sixth (teddy bear's) step on the left: Our partners and you will find this text you corrected to me.

    Please give me your opinion about the English version.

    englishforgotten - I have forgotten my English because I haven't practiced it for a long time.
    Click on my screen name to send me an email (not a PM) that has the link to the website.

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    Re: Will you correct this, please?

    Quote Originally Posted by Ann1977 View Post
    Click on my screen name to send me an email (not a PM) that has the link to the website.
    Thanks! I got it just fine.

    That is a lovely website!

    What a nice thing to be interested in.


    As for the English, in context it reads perfectly. I never stopped once to figure out what something means. I never came to a stop by noticing something wrong.

    I think this is a really good piece of work ... and a grand hobby!

    Best wishes!

    ~ Ann

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    Re: Will you correct this, please?

    Thanks a lot.

    It's nice that you were interested in it.

    I think it's great here on the Internet that there are people like you who are very helpful.

    Whenever I have language problems, or technical ones with my computer I have found help. It's practical. And it's free. I really appreciate it. That's a good point of the Internet.

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    Re: Will you correct this, please?

    Quote Originally Posted by englishforgotten View Post
    Thanks a lot.

    It's nice that you were interested in it.

    I think it's great here on the Internet that there are people like you who are very helpful.

    Whenever I have language problems, or technical ones with my computer I have found help. It's practical. And it's free. I really appreciate it. That's a good point of the Internet.
    You're right. It's like having a big sister who knows EVERYTHING!!

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