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Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
One of the most perplexing dilemmas teaching/pedagogy policy makers are confronted with in modern society is the question whether the students should be assigned homework or not. Those who claim the teachers should give assignments to children believe that it is a sound/ appropriate teaching method.. On the other hand, people who insist the everyday homework should not be a must contend that homework does not work in every way. I am afraid I can hardly agree with the former argument as far as it goes. For my part, I vote for the latter one, as it sounds to me to be more reasonable. I will reason and provide evidence in the following discussion.
To begin with, it is generally accepted that the majority of students dislike the compulsory assignments. I have just read a study recently published in a Chinese Journal of Psychological Research where a neurophysiologist highlighted that, from personal experience, most people are naturally dissatisfied with imcposed work. He pointed out," We would like to choose what to do, not to be chosen." Therefore, how can pupils be happy with piles of everyday homework that they must complete within a certain period of time? Of course not. We ourselves hateto work overtime after work, let alone children.
Besides, an equally key reason to the unnecessary assignments is the students themselves who understand what they need to learn or work on after school. The story of my nephewoffers an illustrative example validating the truth of my argument: my nephew was not good at Indian history and he really wanted/ needed to spend more time on that, while his history teacher gave him lots of assignments of Australian history. He complained that he only want to strengthen the part of history he needed to know/ learn. Such cases/ examples are not rare, in reality, frequently many students at primary schools, secondary schools and high schools are faced with the same problem as my nephew.
Last but not least, common sense leads us to the point: the true beneficial teachers should be those who encourage students to break the status quo and define them as they choose. Not every one has the ability to manage all the courses as per the teachers’ requests. In other words, students should have the power to choose their favorite subjects instead of endeavoring / struggling to finish the unwanted homework full of the "boring" subjects.
Undeniably, we should also notice that sometimes the students still need homework since several of the young students do not understand how to make use of the time to study. Still, I still believe the homework is not necessary to be assigned every day. Nevertheless, such a closer look at the disadvantages of everyday assignments offers some startling surprises to those advocating assignments. Taking all these factors into consideration, I am convinced that it seems to be highly advisable for the teachers not to give homework to students every day.