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    Kindly check my sentences

    Diamond Ids presents Shooting Stars Collection

    Shooting Stars Collection presented by Diamond Ids

    Diamond Ids’ shooting stars collection

    Kindly let me know which is the best line for the headline and if there is any other way to write, kindly suggest

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    Re: Kindly check my sentences

    Quote Originally Posted by new2grammar View Post
    Diamond Ids presents Shooting Stars Collection

    Shooting Stars Collection presented by Diamond Ids

    Diamond Ids’ shooting stars collection

    Kindly let me know which is the best line for the headline and if there is any other way to write, kindly suggest
    Dear new2:

    If this will be used as a headline, I would write: Diamond Ids presents Its Shooting Stars Collection. As a headline, though, Diamond Ids presents Shooting Stars Collection will work.
    Is it a headline designed to promote the products? If so, Diamond Ids Presents Its Exciting (or some other adjective: exclusive/glamorous/etc.) New Shooting Stars Collection might also work.

    Petra

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