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    Default Informal letter. Check is wanted!!!

    Hello. I haven't been learnng English for 2 years. Now I decided to pass an FCE test, finally.
    Could you please check my first informal letter for a long time?

    The task: Your friend has sent you an email asking you about arrangemants to attend a musiacal festival next week. Reply to her e-mail.


    Dear Gloria,

    Thank you for your e-mail. I was really glad to hear that you decided to arrange a musical festival attendace. I would be greatful to help you. But, unfortunately, I am not sure if I am free enough to do it because I have to visit my granny as soon as it is possible. I promissed to help her about the garden almost two weeks ago. But I'll try to do my best!

    What could I do to help you? I could send everyone e-mails telling them the time of our meeting. When does the festival starts? I think we whold meet an our before it. I could also orrange an after-party if I managed to have some free time. Would you mind it? I suppose, no. What would you like to eat and drink? I suggest fish and chips. We could buy it in the nearest supermarket. And I would like to have coke for a drink.

    Waiting for your reply. I hope we will manage to arrange everything on time.

    Love,
    Kate.

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    Default Re: Informal letter. Check is wanted!!!

    I'm sorry - Checking is wanted)

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    Default Re: Informal letter. Check is wanted!!!

    Hey, its not too bad but you should use more colloquial expresions like wanna, gotta, kinda etc. and i wouldnt use expresions like could, would because in my opinion its too formal. You can also use more colloquial words, there are a lot of websites, just use google :) And dont forget that you dont want to be like other FCE participants, you want to capture FCE commission

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    Default Re: Informal letter. Check is wanted!!!

    Thanks a lot! I'm glad to hear that I didn't forget everything!
    I'd try to do my best!

    But do i have any grammar mistakes? Or Lexical?

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    I think the grammar is almost good. And as I said you can say instead of I am -> I'm or as soon as possible-> a.s.a.p. The more colloquial grammar and words you learn, the better mark you get on FCE. And if you fix this little mistakes, the tone will be great :)

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    Many thanks! You really encouraged me!
    I promis to fix everything. And do you think I can post several more letter cause I need corrections and practice?

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    Yeah absolutely :)

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    Default Re: Informal letter. Check is wanted!!!

    Quote Originally Posted by Katue View Post
    Hello. I haven't been learnng English for 2 years. Now I decided to pass an FCE test, finally.
    Could you please check my first informal letter for a long time?

    The task: Your friend has sent you an email asking you about arrangemants to attend a musiacal festival next week. Reply to her e-mail.


    Dear Gloria,

    Thank you for your e-mail. I was really glad to hear that you decided to attend the arrange a musical festival attendace. I would be greatful happy to help you. But, unfortunately, I am not sure if I am will be free enough to do it come too because I have to visit my granny as soon as it is possible. I promised to help her about the with her garden almost two weeks ago. But I'll try to do my best! "Granny" is probably okay. It's informal, so starting with "But" should be okay, but you might want to say what you'll do your best to do. I'll do my best to try to attend with you?

    What could I do to help you? I could send everyone e-mails not everyone accepts e-mails as a plural yettelling them the time of our meeting. You said you may not be able to go -so at this point, there is no meeting.When does the festival starts? I think we whold should meet an hour before it starts/begins. I could also arrange an after-party if I managed to have some free time. Would you mind itenjoy that? I suppose, no. If you change from "mind" to "enjoy" then "I suppose you would not" doesn't make any sense. What would you like to eat and drink? I suggest fish and chips. We could buy it in the nearest supermarket. And I would like to have Coke for a drink.

    Waiting for your reply. I hope we will manage to arrange everything on time.

    Love,
    Kate.
    I have never taken the FCE, nor have I ever studied for it, but "wanna," "gotta," etc. make me want to SCREAM when I see them in writing. I agree that contractions (I'm, we've) are very natural, but I can't agree that "wanna" is ever something to strive for in anything in English that will be graded unless you are writing dialogue.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Default Re: Informal letter. Check is wanted!!!

    Well its your opinion, but my american teacher said that they are gonna love that expressions :) its very natural, they use it all the time.. :) but whatever..

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    Default Re: Informal letter. Check is wanted!!!

    Barb_D, thank you. I thought that wanna and all that stuff didn't sound good too.
    Last edited by Katue; 24-Nov-2009 at 21:28.

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