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    Can anyone edit my passage?

    Leaving her shoes up and down, she was walking. Because She did not have time to fit them together. Her white and gray scarf was hanging on an armchair and her pyjamas were laid on bed in the next room. In a lumpy newspaper under the rug was a bunch of bank-notes which saved for her son to rent an apartment. Time was 11 and I was waiting for her coming back.......

    I will continue this story tomorrow.
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    Smile Re: Can anyone edit my passage?

    Quote Originally Posted by taghavi View Post

    Leaving her shoes up and down, she was walking.Because she did not have time to arrange them (put them in order). Her white and gray scarf was hanging from an armchair and her pajamas were laid on the bed in the next room.

    In a lumpy newspaper under the rug,there was a bunch of banknotes(bank bills) which shehad saved for her son to rent an apartment. It was eleven (o'clock) and I was waiting for her (to come back) coming back... .


    I will continue this story tomorrow.

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    Re: Can anyone edit my passage?

    Thanks for editing Chester.
    I checked pyjamas as I wrote; it was correct though.

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    Quote Originally Posted by taghavi View Post
    Thanks for editing Chester.
    I checked pyjamas as I wrote; it was correct though.
    Different spellings!
    pyjamas seems to be the British one.

    It's amazing that we're talking about a word that belongs to our language!
    Did you know that? It's not English, it's Persian!!!

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    Re: Can anyone edit my passage?

    No, I thought it was french. interesting!

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    Wink Re: Can anyone edit my passage?

    Quote Originally Posted by taghavi View Post
    No, I thought it was french. interesting!

    The original Farsi word is/was :Bijame: not wearing formal garment.

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    Re: Can anyone edit my passage?

    Yes, thanks.

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