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    Lightbulb I need ideas for this one sentence --->

    Hi there!
    My name is Jane, and I am in the process of writing an article about UTIs.

    I want the first paragraph to be kind of commercial. I have had my own ideas for this sentence (below.)

    1) Hey, my name is Jane... And this is most likelt going to be the most important article you'll ever read about urinary tract infections!

    2) Hey my name is Jane... And this is going to be the most important article you'll ever read about urinary tract infections!

    My problem is that I think that the first sentence sounds "wrong "because of most likely + most important article. To many most in that sentence.

    And the second sounds to self confident.

    Can someone please give me other suggestions? I want the structure of the sentence to be like above; Hey my name is Jane... And ... !

    Of course I want the sentence to follow the grammar rules.

    Thanks a lot! I really appriciate the help!
    /Jane

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    Default Re: I need ideas for this one sentence --->

    Quote Originally Posted by blueberry10 View Post
    Hi there!
    My name is Jane, and I am in the process of writing an article about UTIs.

    I want the first paragraph to be kind of commercial. I have had my own ideas for this sentence (below.)

    1) Hey, my name is Jane... And this is most likelt going to be the most important article you'll ever read about urinary tract infections!

    2) Hey my name is Jane... And this is going to be the most important article you'll ever read about urinary tract infections!

    My problem is that I think that the first sentence sounds "wrong "because of most likely + most important article. To many most in that sentence.

    And the second sounds to self confident.

    Can someone please give me other suggestions? I want the structure of the sentence to be like above; Hey my name is Jane... And ... !

    Of course I want the sentence to follow the grammar rules.

    Thanks a lot! I really appriciate the help!
    /Jane
    If you want "commercial" perhaps something like this...

    This is the most important article on urinary tract infections you will ever read! Hi, my name is Jane and....

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    Smile Re: I need ideas for this one sentence --->

    Quote Originally Posted by blueberry10 View Post


    Hi there!
    My name is Jane, and I am in the process of writing an article about UTIs.


    In the process ofusually refers to INDUSTRIAL movements;
    In the course of seems to be more appropriate here.

    I want the first paragraph to be kind of commercial. I have had my own ideas for this sentence (below.)


    1) Hey, my name is Jane... And this is most likelt going to be the most important article you'll ever read about urinary tract infections!

    You should never introduce yourself this way in an article. All the personal information has to appear on the abstract page.

    2) Hey my name is Jane... And this is going to be the most important article you'll ever read about urinary tract infections!

    Hey: who are you saying hello to? An "article" is not a "lecture",
    and it's incredibly unusual to use interjections in a scientific context,
    particularly in an article. Try something like the following suggestion:

    Urinary Tract Infections
    by
    Jane Johnson
    A great deal has been written on the importance of UTI, but my article
    which is based on the most recent scientific findings, will give the reader
    new insights into the real nature of the disease, its causes and treatment.
    As a result, this article can prove to be the most important one of its kind.

    My problem is that I think that the first sentence sounds "wrong "because of most likely + most important article. To many most in that sentence.

    And the second one sounds to show more confidence.

    Can someone please give me other suggestions? I want the structure of the sentence to be like above; Hey my name is Jane... And ... !

    Of course I want the sentence to follow the grammar rules.

    Thanks a lot! I really appriciate the help!
    /Jane
    Good luck

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