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    Hello again. Would you mind helping me with just a few lines? Thanks in advance. That is the subject:

    People speaks Tsar Cannon's thunder
    When it has the will to wonder
    If you're the true ruler of the land


    By "speak" I mean uses "cannon's thunder" as the way of comunicating, in other words - they fight. So would this construction be correct?
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    Default Re: need some help, please

    Please! Is it correct or not?

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    Default Re: need some help, please

    Quote Originally Posted by b.a.d. View Post
    Hello again. Would you mind helping me with just a few lines? Thanks in advance. That is the subject:

    People speaks Tsar Cannon's thunder
    When it has the will to wonder
    If you're the true ruler of the land

    By "speak" I mean uses "cannon's thunder" as the way of comunicating, in other words - they fight. So would this construction be correct?
    Hi!

    I'm not a teacher.

    It's a bit bombastic in form and somehow fuzzy in substance.

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    Default Re: need some help, please

    Man, thanks a lot, but I don't neen no sarcasm, I need to know whether it is grammaticaly correct or not.

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    Default Re: need some help, please

    Try it with "the Tsar's cannons' thunder" if you mean the many cannons that belong to the Tsar.

    I'm not great with poetry, but I had a hard time understanding what you meant.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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