I would appreciate any help to correct my letter. It's my first letter to one of university faculty members and it's really urgent.
Dear professor XXX
I am a recent graduate of University of XXX in XXX with a bachelor’s degree in electrical engineering majoring in electronics. Since I was one of the top three students at my major, I have been accepted to continue my education through a master’s degree at the same university as a talented student without an entrance exam. However, since I did not find any remarkable challenge in my B.S education there, I am really keen to pursue my graduate studies in XXX and particularly at the XXX University and be a part of the graduate program at this institution due to its great research opportunities and facilities as well as utilize your specialty in my first choice field, communications.
During my undergraduate studies, while broadening my knowledge of many new concepts of analogue and digital electronics, I had some supplementary studies and did some of my optional courses in communication systems which helped me find my places of interests in this field. And I wrote my thesis on cooperative diversity in wireless networks. I have a great enthusiasm with some research areas you have been involved with including Multi-input multi-output (MIMO) communication, Cooperative Communications and Performance analysis over fading channels. Some of your journal papers, namely “On the Distortion Exponents of Layered Broadcast Transmission in Multi-Relay Cooperative Networks” really attract me. Your in-depth Knowledge and longitudinal researches on my scientific interests and my own ambition to further my knowledge and conduct qualitative studies make me believe that I could quench my thirst for knowledge under your supervision and as one of your master students.
In enclosing herewith my CV, I look forward to hearing from you soon. If I can provide you with any further information on my background and qualifications, please let me know. Thank you for your consideration.