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    Question Looking for a final touch on my Motivation Letter...please?

    Hi everyone!

    I have written the following motivation letter to apply for a quantitative internship in a bank, in a position such as a credit risk analyst. It requires strong mathematical and programming skills, as well as a good knowledge in finance and an excellent grasp on English.
    Although it must be very enthusiastic, it should not be "too much".

    Thank you!

    Here it is:



    Dear Sir or Madam,

    I am writing to apply for the <INTERNSHIP>, listed in <WHERE I FOUND IT>.

    I have recently graduated from the business school of the University of Lausanne, and earned a Bachelor of Science in Economics. I also completed two semesters in the University of British Columbia, Vancouver, Canada, where I reached an excellent level of English. Throughout my studies, I acquired an extended knowledge in finance and economics, which I look forward to applying to the professional world. But this is not the only reason why I am applying for this internship.

    I also want to learn. I am always eager to learn more, in order to make the difference. Indeed I learned, in parallel to my studies, the programming languages C++, JAVA, HTML and others, which provide me with the excitement of putting mathematics principles into practice. Speaking of the latter, I have also worked assiduously to improve my knowledge in quantitative finance as well as in financial engineering, going way further of what was taught in my undergraduate lessons. I want to make the most of this urge for work and learning by joining your <TEAM>.

    Not only do I have the ambition to excel, but also to take part actively in the everyday business of the <FIRM>, learn how it works internally, meet new people and find out how I could turn this internship into the most enriching experience. Although I am an excellent team worker, I can as well perfectly work independently, my strong motivation and my sense of organization allow for a passionate and efficient work. I am a quick-learner, and want to take good use of my ability to solve problems, add my contributions, and maybe change things for the better. And I cannot envisage a better start as in the <FIRM>.

    Indeed, <FIRM> is to me the top-level of the financial world. Your division <DIVISION>, is exactly what I am looking for: <WHAT I AM LOOKING FOR, i.e. dynamic, challenging, exciting, demanding, socially active>.

    I have now only one desire, joining your team and take part in driving it towards success.

    I look forward to hearing from you.

    Yours Faithfully,

    Blanc Guillaume

    P.S.:
    I am available from January 1st 2010 to September 1st 2010
    Feel free to call me 24/7 for further information on my mobile phone:
    I would love to call you in the days following my application to make a first contact
    Last edited by Willwhite; 08-Dec-2009 at 09:36.

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    Default Re: Looking for a final touch on my Motivation Letter...please?

    Any suggestions?

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    Default Re: Looking for a final touch on my Motivation Letter...please?

    not too bad

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    Default Re: Looking for a final touch on my Motivation Letter...please?

    Well thank you :)

    I posted it, but my application hasen't been answered yet.

    wait'n see =)

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