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    Default Kindsly check the letter for new year wishes

    We at Dwarkadas Jewellers wish you and your family all the best in 2010. We appreciate your patronage and hope to deliver beyond your expectations as we have always done in the past.
    The 2009 marked the opening of our New Diamond Showroom, thanks for your support and good wishes.
    We wish you a wonderful year ahead full of blessing and happiness. May this New Year 2010 will be more prosperous for us all!

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    Default Re: Kindsly check the letter for new year wishes

    The 2009 marked the opening of our New Diamond Showroom, thanks for your support and good wishes.
    We wish you a wonderful year ahead full of blessing and happiness. May this New Year 2010 will be more prosperous for us all!
    (Not a teacher)

    The most obvious errors I see are:

    "The 2009 marked the opening..." - Remove the first "the".

    "May this New Year 2010 will be more prosperous..." - Certainly, remove the "will", as the "May" and "will" don't go together. Also, saying, "this New Year 2010" sounds awkward. Perhaps just, "this New Year", or just, "May 2010 be more prosperous"?



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