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    Default the person who i admire

    I think this writting is not so good, plz check for me, thanks

    Who is the one helps me grow up, gives me advice, takes care of me, shows me the right way, always support me greatly, gives me a birthdate and does many many things just for me, it's my mother. I love her and really admire her for many reasons.
    Perhaps, the thing makes me admire her the most that she was the first teacher of mine. She has been teaching me everything since I was young until now, and for the future. I remember that the first foreign language I studied from her is Russian. I could speak some simple words in Russian when i was just 5 years old such as "hello", "good bye". At that time, i made a poem about the ant and my mom, of course, was the first person listening to me.
    Now, she is still a best friend, I think, she is the greatest psychologist that i have known. Sometimes, Sometimes when I was down because of failures in my life, I always went to meet her for asking some advice. As my expect, I always felt better after that.
    I also admire her for her personality which is a mix of honesty and strong faith in god, cause and effect. " Take us by ourselves into others' position before doing anything" she said. And she is also a predictor. She can get the future in her dreams. She ever told me that she had found out my father before seeing him . Besides, she was sure that I would be a boy before getting pregnant. Oh my god! it's strange. I can not do the same thing.
    There is a woman who takes an important part in my life and chang my thought and action. I really love my mother. I think I am the happiest person because I have a great mother like that. How do you think of your mother?

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    Default Re: the person who i admire

    Hi

    Hope this helps! I made corrections on the text itself. Compare your version with this. A great mother and a great writer indeed!

    Who helps me grow up, gives me advice, takes care of me, shows me the right way, always supports me greatly, gives me a birthdate and does many many things just for me. It's my mother. I love her and really admire her for many reasons.
    Perhaps, the main thing that makes me admire her the most is the fact that she was my first teacher. She has been teaching me everything since I was young until now, and will be for the future. I remember that the first foreign language I studied from her is Russian. I could speak some simple words such as "hello"and "good bye"in Russian when I was just 5 years old. At that time, I wrote a poem about the ant (you mean ant or aunt?) and my mom. Of course, she was the first person willing to listen to me.
    Now, she remains my best friend. I think she is the greatest psychologist I have ever known. Sometimes, when I am down because of failure in my life, I always approach her seeking advice. As I expect, I always felt better after talking to her.


    I also admire her for her personality which is I can describe as a mix of honesty and strong faith in God. A cause and effect equation. " Take us by ourselves into others' position before doing anything" she said. And she is also a predictor. She can tell the future from her dreams. She has once told me that she had found out about my father before meeting him . Besides, she was sure that I would be a boy before getting pregnant. Oh my god! it's strange. I can not do the same thing.
    There is a woman who takes an important part in my life and changes my thoughts and actions. I really love my mother. I think I am the happiest person in the world because I have a great mother like her. How do you think of your mother?


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