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    Re: An important color!

    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
    The two words mean pretty much the same thing. That's why I say if you can use one you can use the other.

    I wouldn't say imagery is awkward, but if the reader or listener doesn't understand the imagery he is unlikely to understand the poem.

    Poem? I didn't write a poem. Anyway, how can I clear the imagery of my prose?

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    Black can spread over someone's skin and cried for losing rights all over the world in order to believe that blacks have equal right as whites, reds and yellows.
    Thank you so much for your help!

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    Thank you so much for your help!
    stevenmark33's post was simply a copy of one of your incorrect sentences. Don't take it for a correction.
    Maybe he'll explain what his intentions were.

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    #14

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    Poem? I didn't write a poem. Anyway, how can I clear the imagery of my prose?
    You are right. This one probably doesn't qualify as a poem, but the point is the same anyway. If the reader doesn't understand the imagery he probably won't get the message. Is your question how do you make your message more clear? I suppose you could avoid imagery altogether. That is, of course, your choice.


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    Quote Originally Posted by RonBee View Post
    You are right. This one probably doesn't qualify as a poem, but the point is the same anyway. If the reader doesn't understand the imagery he probably won't get the message. Is your question how do you make your message more clear? I suppose you could avoid imagery altogether. That is, of course, your choice.

    Thank you. I will try to do that.

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    stevenmark33's post was simply a copy of one of your incorrect sentences. Don't take it for a correction.
    Maybe he'll explain what his intentions were.
    Please help me out Raymoot.

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    Please help me out Raymoot.
    With what? And please don't call me Raymoot.

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    With what? And please don't call me Raymoot.
    Sorry for wrong spelling of your name. Sometimes I write too quickly to forget how to spell correctly.
    As you told me Stevenmark didn't correct my errors he, in stead, wrote my wrong sentence. Well, I will appreciate it if you can edit this sentence for me.

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    Quote Originally Posted by taghavi View Post
    Sorry for wrong spelling of your name. Sometimes I write too quickly to forget how to spell correctly.
    As you told me Stevenmark didn't correct my errors he, in stead, wrote my wrong sentence. Well, I will appreciate it if you can edit this sentence for me.
    Black can spread over someone's skin and cried for losing rights all over the world in order to believe that blacks have equal right as whites, reds and yellows.

    Ok, we don't call people reds and yellows, and rarely 'blacks' and 'whites' these days - It's impolite.
    Black can spread over someone's skin. I can't paraphrase this. If a person is black, they don't become black by 'spreading'. They are generally born black and stay that way, unless they're Michael Jackson. Black spreading across your skin signifies a melanoma - an aggressive skin cancer.

    and cried for losing rights all over the world
    There's not subject here, The way you have written it "Black" is the subject.
    I think you mean someone is crying for not having rights - whether they lost rights or never had them in the first place.

    in order to believe that blacks have equal right as whites, reds and yellows.
    ... so that they can believe that black people have the same rights as people of other races.

    You possibly mean something like:
    Black people cry/protest all over the world to gain the same rights as people of other races.

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    #20

    Re: An important color!

    Thank you.

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