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    please check this important letter

    Hi,
    I have to write this important letter for my school. I' d like to know from native speakers if it's ok.
    thanks.
    Rip


    Dear Sirs,
    with this letter we would like to inform you that on the 5th of February at about 10 o' clock a group of students of our vocational high school for Tourism and Catering "G. Minuto"will visit the camp.
    The students will be accompanied by three teachers and a boy who is serving his civil service for the Austrian Holocaust Memorial Service.
    We are looking forward to receive your kind confirmation.
    Yours faithfully

    The teachers accompanying the group

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    Re: please check this important letter

    Quote Originally Posted by ripley View Post
    Hi,
    I have to write this important letter for my school. I' d like to know from native speakers if it's ok.
    thanks.
    Rip


    Dear Sirs,
    with this letter we would like to inform you that on the 5th of February at about 10 o' clock a group of students of our vocational high school for Tourism and Catering "G. Minuto"will visit the camp.
    The students will be accompanied by three teachers and a boy who is serving his civil service for the Austrian Holocaust Memorial Service.
    We are looking forward to receive your kind confirmation.
    Yours faithfully

    The teachers accompanying the group
    ***NOT A TEACHER***Before the writing teachers reply, may I try: Dear Sirs: We wish to inform you that some students from G. Minuto Tourism and Catering Vocational High School will visit your camp on February 5 at about 10 a.m. They will be accompanied by three teachers and a young man who is working for the Austrian Holocaust Memorial Service. We would greatly appreciate your confirmation.

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    Re: please check this important letter

    Quote Originally Posted by TheParser View Post
    ***NOT A TEACHER***Before the writing teachers reply, may I try: Dear Sirs: We wish to inform you that some students from G. Minuto Tourism and Catering Vocational High School will visit your camp on February 5 at about 10 a.m. They will be accompanied by three teachers and a young man who is working for the Austrian Holocaust Memorial Service. We would greatly appreciate your confirmation.
    Hi, Thanks a lot for your suggestions. the fact is that it is important that they know how many students are going there (I can't just say some);
    besides, are you sure I can say "your " camp?
    Rip

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    Re: please check this important letter

    Quote Originally Posted by ripley View Post
    Hi, Thanks a lot for your suggestions. the fact is that it is important that they know how many students are going there (I can't just say some);
    besides, are you sure I can say "your " camp?
    Rip
    ***NOT A TEACHER***Great questions! (1) You just said a group of students. Yes, of course, you can tell them the exact number so that they can prepare for the visitors. (2) "The camp" is fine. I just used "your" because they, of course, know about their own camp. In fact, if you want to be more formal, you may want to write the official name of the camp instead of only "the camp." Thank you.

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    Re: please check this important letter

    Quote Originally Posted by TheParser View Post
    ***NOT A TEACHER***Great questions! (1) You just said a group of students. Yes, of course, you can tell them the exact number so that they can prepare for the visitors. (2) "The camp" is fine. I just used "your" because they, of course, know about their own camp. In fact, if you want to be more formal, you may want to write the official name of the camp instead of only "the camp." Thank you.
    Sorry I forgot ot write part of the sentence ( a group of 34 students...)
    Thanks a lot.
    Rip

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    Re: please check this important letter

    Quote Originally Posted by ripley View Post
    Sorry I forgot ot write part of the sentence ( a group of 34 students...)
    Thanks a lot.
    Rip
    You're very welcome. Hope everyone has a nice trip.

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    Re: please check this important letter

    Quote Originally Posted by TheParser View Post
    You're very welcome. Hope everyone has a nice trip.
    Thanks, but I think it will be a hard time because the visit of the Nazi concentration camp will make everyone sad....

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    Re: please check this important letter

    [QUOTE=ripley;556769]Thanks, but I think it will be a hard time because the visit of the Nazi concentration camp will make everyone sad....[/QUOTEWhen people say "camp" here in the States, we think of a summer camp for people. I forgot that the word "camp" could have another meaning in Europe. After the students return from their trip, they will certainly have a better understanding of history.

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