(Not a teacher)Please Help me To correct my article Cause I want to post this on my personal blog :)
The Poker Temptation
Fooled by ZyngaPoker
Poker is simply like a sexy woman who easily seduces a man to love her and many of them are addicted to Poker,
andspending their time onplaying it all day. AndI am actually one of the victims :P. Previously, I wasn't addicted to this online game until my friend asked me to play it and I thought, "why not?"
And you know what?
Since the first time I played poker I've been addicted to and hooked on it till this time. I closely spend my time playing poker 3-5 hours each day and after playing it then I realize that I was fooled by poker. Huh *Sigh*. Actually (and definitely), I want to snap out of this bad habit. Hence, I try to busy myself with
another stuff. However hard it is, I'll keep trying because it's not that easy to stop this addiction.
AndYou have to have chips to play poker anyway because chips are the only key to play poker. That's why poker-mania is always trying hard to grab as many chips as muchas possible. Hmmm, AsI'm a poker freak and I've been experiencing what it feels like becoming a poker freak. Accordingly, I'd rather you didn't play or even try poker. Just play another games. But, If you're still curious about it, then just try it and get a feel for it.
AND WHAT ABOUT THIS ARTICLE
THE BEST PERFORMANCE at 2010 GRAMMY WAS ABSOLUTELY PINK
OMG what can I say.
ButGuys if you have not watched Pink's performance on the last Grammy, I welcome you to watch, and I even force you to watch it. Just Google or Youtube the video. I was totally speechless when I watched that video on Youtube. butActually, The Grammy was rerun on Indosiar (one of the Indonesian Channels), but Pink's performance was censored so I couldn't watch it.
When I saw the tweets of many singers and audience members on Twitter that said Pink was cool, I figured that her performance was awesome. These are some of those tweets:
"It's official....the age of lip-sync is over. If P!nk can sing live, upside down, spinning/flying through the air then there are no excuses"
"@Pink you were the most inspiring woman tonight! The one with the MOST heart!"
"Pink! Pink! Pink! Yes. Yes. Yes. Wow! Wow! Wow!"
And sooooo many good comments about her performance!
What made me astonished was her capability of singing live while hanging in the air and her voice stay cool, stable and awesome.
andThe combination of the music, voice and stage act was really really yummy, beautiful and outstanding. I felt sooooooooo touched when I hear that song, I dunno the title though.
But due to the perfection of her performance there's a rumor that stated she was lip-syncing, and I don't believe it 'cause I can distinguish between the lip-sync one and the live one.Tthereafter, Pink on her personal Twitter
confirmed and perceivedacknowledged and denied the rumor, which is still blowing till now, that she does not lip-sync and she also stated that she hasn't ever lip-synced in her entire career. Here is a quote from her ersonel Twitter:
"I hear there's a debate over whether or not I sang live on grammies. I have never lip synched in my entire life. I'm 100% against it."
Okay, as for me - I let the rumor be rumor, but I'll keep believing that a true diva like Pink wouldn't lip-sync. I love you Piiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii iink!
Oh, by the way, if you are reluctant to Youtube the video I'll put it here. Enjoy.
I've corrected it entirely - you seem to inconsistently use ellipses and capital letters. I don't know if this is a conscious style thing of yours, but I corrected it anyway.