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    Smile Please check up my essay- espically my grammar

    The charts illustrate that study in reasons is base on different age of students and support is concerned by employers
    In upper figure, indicates that the reasons for career and interest have different results among students by age. Finding out under 26, the reason for career is just under 80% and ratio compare reason for interest is almost eight time. At the side of index, shows that over age of 49 being a student as for interest accounting for 70%. There is a strange phenomenon in age between 40 and 49 getting equal value as 40%. After age is getting old, the reason for career in proportion is gradually decline. Besides, that reason for interest is totally reverse.
    Moving on to under graph, shows employer support to Time off and Help with fees for students. The statistics culminate in age of under 26 accounting for 60%. Therefore, the lower percent shows up at age of 30s making up 30%

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    Re: Please check up my essay- espically my grammar

    Quote Originally Posted by merchant View Post
    The charts illustrate that study in reasons is base on different age of students and support is concerned by employers
    In upper figure, indicates that the reasons for career and interest have different results among students by age. Finding out under 26, the reason for career is just under 80% and ratio compare reason for interest is almost eight time. At the side of index, shows that over age of 49 being a student as for interest accounting for 70%. There is a strange phenomenon in age between 40 and 49 getting equal value as 40%. After age is getting old, the reason for career in proportion is gradually decline. Besides, that reason for interest is totally reverse.
    Moving on to under graph, shows employer support to Time off and Help with fees for students. The statistics culminate in age of under 26 accounting for 60%. Therefore, the lower percent shows up at age of 30s making up 30%
    You really need more practice and experience with basic grammar and vocabulary before attempting exercises of this complexity. There are errors in almost every phrase in this and your other post.
    Especially in this post, it's difficult to know what you are saying without seeing the chart.

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