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    lonly is offline Newbie
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    Cool Please correct my paragraph

    Hi , I am Ali from the earth. How are you. I am so happy to be with you in this

    amazing and useful forum. I write this paragraph to measure my second language

    level. I have started my learning before one year ago. My listening improves

    every day, writing and speaking too. not just i like the English language, but I

    respect the west civilization and principles. I want to live in California-USA or

    in London - England. It is just a dream. another thing, I have some hobbies and

    skills, I love the poem and I wrote some poetries (just tryings).

    Finally, I wish someday I will speak English, and my language will release my

    pains, then the winds will take them away ... away.

    Thank you for your time and attention.

    Lovely - Ali

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    simin alavizadeh is offline Newbie
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    Default Re: Please correct my paragraph

    Quote Originally Posted by lonly View Post
    Hi , I am Ali from the earth. How are you. I am so happy to be with you in this

    amazing and useful forum. I write this paragraph to measure my second language

    level. I have started learning English before one year ago. My listening , writing, and speaking is improving. not only i like the English language, but also I

    respect the west civilization and principles. I want to live in California-USA or

    in London - England. It is just a dream. By the way, I have some hobbies and

    skills, I love the poem and I wrote some poetries (just tryings).

    Finally, I wish one day I will speak English, and my language will release my

    pains, then the wind will take them away ... away.

    Thank you for your time and attention.

    Lovely - Ali
    I'm not an expert but I hope it'll help.

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    lonly is offline Newbie
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    Default Re: Please correct my paragraph

    Simin Alavizadeh

    Thank you very much

    your notes are right

    and they helped me

    thank you honey

    I fell that i want huge you

    Lovely ... your pupil Ali

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