i need some help. i'm an university student and i have some problems with writing but i can't understand my gap... i hope that someone can help me!
the title of my essay:
Marriage is the best medicine
From a recent research has emerged that a happy marriage is good for your health and can up to some years of your life. In this context, Professor Robert Kaplan, who led the research, affirmed that a lot of studies had shown that unmarried adults have a higher probability of early death that those who are married.
Basically, when you are in a relationship there is an element of social connectedness and interaction that prevent the isolation that singles have got. Taking care of someone else and living for another person who loves you, help you to live longer. Also these considerations reduce stress and can aid you deal with problems better. People, who decided to unite their entire life and creating a union with someone else, adopt healthier lifestyles; take a greater interest in each otherís health, contributing to improved wellbeing.
Being the marriage so healthy, the divorce is consequently a stressful experience, above all for women, as emerged from the study. As the matter of fact, women who divorce are 50 per cent more likely to develop heart disease in later like than those who stay married. The underlying reasons could cause physical and mental problems for a marriage break up are recognized primary into the emotional stress with also the subsequent upheaval of moving house or losing income.
On the contrary, men appear much more stronger than women. In this context, in the study emerges that they have just little effects on their possibility of developing heart problems. This result has given by the fact that women tend to value and think about themselves more in terms of family relationships, whereas men value themselves first of all in terms of their lifeís work.
As the director of Family and Youth Concern, Norman Wells, suggests that marriage is more that a simple piece of paper and it brings positive benefits to all the wider society, starting from the couples themselves arriving to children.
Last edited by valflower; 14-Mar-2010 at 16:38. Reason: cause of my post
Now, valflower, using the suggestions you have received here, post the revised essay in a separate posting.