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    Ebtehal is offline Newbie
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    Default request for help in editing my short essay

    Would you please help me in editing this short essay.
    The topic is (is our culture too soft on issue of work ethics)

    {{The absence of integrity and honesty in some part of the daily life dealings, for the purpose of getting things easily done, getting rid of certain circumstance and commitments ((not generalizing of course)) became unfortunately a habit which reflected on and effected much the work ethics and people get use to it, and started gradually Colonizing our lovely pure culture that we developed, raised on and embedded within us.

    Raising awareness among people/employees, I think is a must}}.




    Thanking you in advance.
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    Default Re: request for help in editing my short essay

    Please, please I need your help.

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    Default Re: request for help in editing my short essay

    The absence of integrity and honesty in some parts of the daily life dealings, for the purpose of getting things easily done done easily and getting rid of certain circumstances and commitments* ((not generalizing of course)) became, unfortunately, a habit which reflected on and affected much the work ethics and people get use to it, and started gradually colonizing** our lovely, pure culture that we developed, raised on nurtured and embedded within became part of us.

    Raising awareness among people/employees, I think, is a must

    * I find these a bit vague
    ** Can culture be colonized?
    The sentence is too long and should be separated into shorter sentences.
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    Default Re: request for help in editing my short essay

    Thank you so much for the help

    Can culture be colonized ( what other word i can use)
    * I find these a bit vague (you mean the whole sectence or the word commitments).

    Thank you once again.

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