[Grammar] Badly written exam paper

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[FONT=&quot]Dear Teacher,
would you agree that the underlined passages in the text below are badly written or expressed?

An invitation to meal in someone’s house usually means a relaxed evening. More often [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]than not [/FONT][FONT=&quot]men do not wear business suits, while the women wear comfortable rather than [/FONT][FONT=&quot]fashionable [/FONT][FONT=&quot]evening clothes.[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]It’s a good idea to take some flowers or a box of chocolates for your hostess; some, additionally, bring a bottle of wine. It does not have to be an expensive wine. The bottle is[/FONT] [FONT=&quot]hardly ever [/FONT][FONT=&quot]opened, and quite often serves as a bottle that tonight’s host takes as a guest to next week’s dinner somewhere else.[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]In most parts of England the hostess expects a short letter of thanks for the evening. Such letters follow a standard formula: you mention the food and the company and express the hope that you will meet again.

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[FONT=&quot]Dear Teacher, [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]would you agree that the underlined passages in the text below are badly written or expressed? [/FONT]
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[FONT=&quot]An invitation to meal :cross: ("meal" is not a verb) in someone’s house usually means a relaxed evening. More often [/FONT][FONT=&quot]than not [/FONT][FONT=&quot]men do not wear business suits, while the women wear comfortable rather than [/FONT][FONT=&quot]fashionable [/FONT][FONT=&quot]evening clothes. :tick:[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]It’s a good idea to take some flowers or a box of chocolates for your hostess; some, additionally, :tick: (except I would omit the commas) bring a bottle of wine. It does not have to be an expensive wine. :tick:The bottle is[/FONT] [FONT=&quot]hardly ever [/FONT][FONT=&quot]opened, and quite often is the bottle that tonight’s host takes as a gift to next week’s dinner somewhere else. :tick:[/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]In most parts of England :tick:the hostess expects a short letter of thanks for the evening. Such letters follow a standard formula: you mention the food and the company and express the hope that you will meet again. [/FONT]

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invitation to a meal.

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Thanks for your replies to my post. The omission of 'a' before a meal is a blatant error. I agree that is improved by changing 'meal' for 'dinner'.
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How about: '[FONT=&quot]men do not wear business suits, while women wear casual rather than formal evening outfits' [/FONT]instead of?: [FONT=&quot]'men do not wear business suits, while the women wear comfortable rather than [/FONT][FONT=&quot]fashionable [/FONT][FONT=&quot]evening clothes'

And how about changing: 'in most parts of England the hostess expects...' for?: 'Generally, in England, a hostess will expect...'

I'd appreciate your comments on those sentences.
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An invitation to meal in someone’s house usually means a relaxed evening. More often [/FONT]
[FONT=&quot]than not [/FONT][FONT=&quot]men do not wear business suits, while the women wear comfortable rather than [/FONT][FONT=&quot]fashionable [/FONT][FONT=&quot]evening clothes.[/FONT]
I think the problem here is your saying what men don't wear, followed by women what do wear. It does sound strange. There's nothing wrong with the underlined part.
* "Michael doesn't study Chemistry, while Jane studies Biology."


[FONT=&quot]It’s a good idea to take some flowers or a box of chocolates for your hostess; some, additionally, bring a bottle of wine. It does not have to be an expensive wine. The bottle is[/FONT] [FONT=&quot]hardly ever [/FONT][FONT=&quot]opened, and quite often serves as a bottle that tonight’s host takes as a guest to next week’s dinner somewhere else.[/FONT]
No, you don't take a bottle of wine as a guest. That would be odd!
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