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    robin lee is offline Newbie
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    Default please check this paragraph for me

    Hello

    Could someone please correct any errors in this paragraph. Thank you.

    His potential employer has requested him to provide a list of his agents and contact information for these people as well as records from any organizations, that he used to work, which are able to confirm his previous work history.

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    Default Re: please check this paragraph for me

    Quote Originally Posted by robin lee View Post
    His potential employer has requested him to that he provide a list of his agents and contact information for these people (who?) as well as records from any organizations, that he used to work for, which that are able to confirm his previous jobs work history.
    Most of your errors here are in streamlining and are understandable. The only thing that sticks out is when you say "these people." What people? Explain this in your paragraph.

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    Default Re: please check this paragraph for me

    a list of his agents and their contact information for these people

    This has been posted in the 'Ask the Teacher' sub-forum to which I responded.

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