I really need your help in
revisingproofreading/checking this story.
There was an old woman and her
marriedson, hiswhose wife was an evil woman. Everyday, shethe wife was telling would tell her husband to take his mother to the nursery home. Untiringly, she was constantly filling his head with evil ideas untill (until)he surrendered to her. They decided to take her to the beach,(.) Her son told her he's taking her to a beach picnic so they went,(.) after sitting for a little while her son told her he's going to bring (her) some coffee and he gave her a note ofwith his phone number and asked her to give thisthe note to anyone in case she wanted to contact him, then went tohis way. The mother waited and waited for her son but he never came back. All this time, she was worried that something bad happened to her son that it took him long to come backthat prevented him from coming back ,(.) She was hungry so she had to eat the meal leftovers. A group of young men saw her alone and hurried to her asking her about her if she needed help whatabouts,(.) She told them the story and gave them the note. When they read the note they were shocked to know that the sun (son) gave up on his mother and left her to anyone who seesread the note. They decided not to tell the poor old lady so they asked her to come with them(,) but she refused, believing her son will would come back,(.) The boys left her alone, upon her insisting. That night, the boy who read the note couldn't go to sleep so he hurried back to the old lady only to find her dead. He wept bitterly to find when he found that she died out of extreme fear that something terrible has had happened to her son. When the son knew came to know about this, he went mad, and now he's an in-patient in a mental hospital.
I know it's bad enough.
Some of the commas should be replaced with full-stops. Try to avoid long sentences. It's not that bad. Nice story with a moral.