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  1. #1
    babaco Guest

    Default Need my CV read, too :-)

    Hi, I need little help witch my CV.

    I want to study abroad and unfortunately I am not a native speaker.
    Thnanks very much in advance.
    Babak

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    Date and place of birth 1980 in Tehran, Iran

    Work experience

    Jan to May 2005 Student apprentice at the AP-Luftfilter Brandenburg,
    GmbH, development of the corporate
    website

    Sep. 2004-Jan 2005 Self-employed as promoter for my-event Berlin, Germany

    Apr. 2004-Sep 2004 Student apprentice at BORSIG Holding, Berlin, Germany
    Development of ‘KennSys’, software to
    manage environmental ratios

    Nov. 2003-Apr. 2004 Student apprentice at BORSIG Hoding, Berlin, Germany
    identification, analysis and presentation
    of environmental ratios, conceptual
    development of a software to manage
    environmental ratios

    2000-2003 Call center agent at FORSA Berlin, Berlin, Germany
    Opinion Research Center


    Education and Qualification

    Oct. 2000 to Sep. 2004 Studies of Industrial Environmental Berlin, Germany
    Computing at the University of
    Applied Sciences FHTW-Berlin,
    Industrial Environmental Computing“
    Bachelor of Science, graduated ‘good’
    Final mark: '2.2’

    1993-2002 Georg Herwegh Gymnasium, Berlin, Germany
    Grammar School




    Extracurricular activities

    Jan. 2005-Apr. 2005 Author of an academic article:
    ‘conceptual development of
    software for the environmental
    controlling to a medium sized
    company’
    presumably appear in print
    in August 2005
    ‘Werkstattberichte aus der
    Betrieblichen
    Umweltinformatik’
    Shaker verlag’

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    Languages German: fluently
    Farsi: fluently
    English: good knowledge
    French: basic knowledge
    Italian: basic knowledge

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    Tdol is online now Editor, UsingEnglish.com
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    Default Re: Need my CV read, too :-)

    at the AP-Luftfilter Brandenburg- I'd delete 'the'

    my-event Berlin- capitals? This is the name, I presume

    of a software - of a program/of software

    Education and Qualification-Education and Qualifications
    Industrial Environmental Computing“
    Bachelor of Science, graduated ‘good’
    Final mark: '2.2’ -delete the ". I'd say Bachelor of Science 2.2/2ii (I wouldn't include 'good' as well as the grade- it's not clear what it means)

    ‘conceptual development of
    software for the environmental
    controlling to a medium sized
    company’- Title Case

    presumably appear in print
    in August 2005- To be pubished in August 2005...

    Languages German: fluently
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  3. #3
    babaco Guest

    Default Re: Need my CV read, too :-)

    Thanks very much tdol.

    Just one question: should I write "Title case" before or after the title?

    Bye

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    Default Re: Need my CV read, too :-)

    Quote Originally Posted by babaco
    Thanks very much tdol.

    Just one question: should I write "Title case" before or after the title?

    Bye
    You don't do either. Instead, title case is a particular way that titles are presented. Thus, yours would be:
    Conceptual Development of Software for the Environmental
    Controlling to a Medium-sized Company
    I would probably write that as:
    Conceptual Development of Software for a Medium-sized Company
    (I don't know what "environmental controlling" is supposed to mean.)


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