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    kidd is offline Newbie
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    Post Cover Letter-1st paragraph

    I googled "correct my resume", and this forum ranked No.1.
    Hopefully someone here will kind enough proofread the first paragraph of my cover letter:(I am applying for a job in the nuclear industry)

    "There is an ever-increasing awareness of the importance of green energy among world leaders and the public; it would be exciting working for the second largest nuclear complex in the world. I would like to express my sincere interest in the Technical Engineer position offered from one of Canada’s Best Diversity Employers- Bruce Power. "

    I welcome any suggestions you may have.

    Thank you,

    Evan

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    Default Re: Cover Letter-1st paragraph

    that bad, eh?
    Ok, I changed to:

    I would like to express my sincere interest in the Technical Engineer position offered at Bruce Power, one of Canada’s Best Diversity Employers. The chance to work for the second largest nuclear complex in the world is very exciting for me. And I look forward to the opportunity to start my professional career as a Technical Engineer.

    how about now?

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