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My country is Somalia and I cry whenever I see my broken country and fighting brothers each other.
1) My biggest dream is to see “The big Somali” not these weak regions which cannot defend its self if it’s been attacked by any enemy.
2) I hope to see these regions going to gather to solve their disagreement on speech by their selves.
3) Somali pirates aren’t terriers not burglars they’re our brothers who protecting and defending our sea after its wealth has stolen and thrown chemicals by foreign countries.
Last edited by Atchan; 01-Jun-2010 at 22:31.
Thank you for you help
I'm not sure about 3). If wealth has already been stolen and chemicals thrown into the sea then what are you defending the sea against? I think I'd rephrase this, since aren't you defending against future theft and pollution and not the past? Also, I'd say 'spewn' instead of 'thrown out' because it's more emotive and also I don't think you 'throw chemicals out' - it sounds like you're thowing them overboard as jetsam! Altenatively 'discharged' (less emotive than 'spewn', more correct that 'thrown out') or 'leaked' (suggests less of an intention to pollute).
Last edited by Atchan; 30-May-2010 at 14:44.