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    My name Srikanth, i am living at Dissukhnagar in my uncle's house. He is nice gentleman. My father name is Mr. Rao, he is agriculture. My mother name Bhavani. I am loving my parents very much.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Acsah View Post
    My name is Srikanth, I am living liveat in Dissukhnagar in at my uncle's house. He is a nice gentleman. My father's name is Mr. Rao and he is agriculture an agriculturist (or a farmer?) My mother's name is Bhavani. I am loving love my parents very much.
    Remember the structure for names:

    My name is...
    My mother's name is...
    My father's name is...

    You don't need to use the present continuous when you are describing your current life:

    I live in Spain.
    I love my friends.
    I work in a shop.

    When you are talking about where you live:

    In + country
    In + city
    At + home (or at my parents' home etc)
    In + a house
    In + a flat/apartment
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    Quote Originally Posted by Acsah View Post
    He is a nice gentleman.
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    I am sonu, I am coming from Bollaram. My native place is Bhopal. I am compeleted BA. My hobby is reading. I am married, my husband is working as administrator in Dubai.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Acsah View Post
    I am Sonu and I am coming come from Bollaram. My native place hometown/home area/home region is Bhopal. I am have compeleted a BA. My hobby is reading. I am married and my husband is working works as an administrator in Dubai.
    In your first sentence you have given 2 facts - your name and where you are from. If you list two things, you join them with the word "and", not a comma. The same rule applies to the final sentence.

    Next - you said "I come from Bollaram. My native place is Bhopal". "I come from.." and "my native place..." mean the same thing. Is Bollaram the city and Bhopal is the area? If so, you just say "I come from Bollaram in Bhopal". Note: We don't use "native place", we just say "I am from/I come from..."

    The past tense of complete is "have completed", not "am completed".

    Again, use of the present continuous isn't required "I am coming" and "My husband is working" can more simply be said as "I come..." and "My husband works..."

    When saying what someone does for a living, we use the indefinite article before the name of the job (in the singular).

    I am a teacher.
    She is an engineer.
    He is an administrator.
    They are teachers. (Plural = no article)
    Last edited by emsr2d2; 06-Jun-2010 at 11:20. Reason: Typo

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    I am studying in NSS at kollam. My collage is connected to Karnataka University. I wanted to do engineering but seats are not available. Now i am doing parttime job. I wanted to bacome an engineer and i wanted to work in MNC company.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Acsah View Post
    I am studying in NSS (is NSS the name of the college or the subject?) at Kollam. My college is connected to Karnataka University. I wanted to do study engineering but seats are not there were no places available. Now I am doing a part-time job. I wanted to become an engineer and I wanted to work in MNC company (you wanted to do those things, in the past, but now you want to do something else?)
    See above.

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    I studying NSS in Kollam. My college connected to Karnataka University. I wanted to do engineering but not got seat. Now i soing parttime job. I want to become a good software engineer and work in MNC company

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    MNC is mult-national company/corporation, right?

    You want to work for an MNC.

    Please take a look at the corrections in the paragraph before yours. You are making some of the same errors twice.
    I'm not a teacher, but I write for a living. Please don't ask me about 2nd conditionals, but I'm a safe bet for what reads well in (American) English.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Acsah View Post
    I am studying NSS in Kollam. My college is connected to Karnataka University. I wanted to do engineering but not got seat there were no places available. Now I am doing a part-time job. I want to become a good software engineer and work in an MNC. company
    As Barb pointed out, some of the corrections I have marked above were already corrected in my previous reply. I have corrected them again here, but please take note of them!!

    Notes:

    - I am studying...
    - My college is...
    - We call it a "university place" not a "seat"
    - I am doing a part-time job (present continuous, indefinite article, hyphen in part-time)
    - As Barb said, MNC = multi-national corporation or multi-national company, so you don't need to add the word "company". You simply want to work in "a multi-national company" or "an MNC".

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