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    Smile ple correct my essay about Barack Hussein Obama

    Barack Hussein Obama
    For many past years until nowadays, the legend of American Presidents were shows there as a white and powerful leaders. Why this idea spread among Americans .it because the idea of been Blacks whom weren’t smart and powerful enough to run a country . African Americans were viewed as less people class because of the color of their skin. In 2008, Barack Obama was elected President of the United States which making him the first black president in U.S.A history. I will discuss how Barack makes a change and if America can accept him as our first black great leader.

    Barack Hussein Obama was born on August 4, 1961 in Honolulu Hawaii. He is of mixed parentage: his father, a black poor and hard worker African born in Kenya, while his mother, a white American that came from Kansas. When he was six years old when his parents divorced and his mother married an Indonesian oil manager. They moved to Indonesia where Obama had great education in a Roman Catholic School. He then returned back to his favorite place Hawaii ,so he continue his school while living with his grandparents. Barack struggled with his own racial identity in his late teens. He couldn't stop until he gains hall his wishes.

    He always work hard to avoid entrance the crime world. He has a strong believe in education among all people classes especially between the black . if Americans voters let him win or not he will continues his plane tell he dead . I believe in every world he was said specially when it comes with acts , for example since the financial crises he help my family more than three time by his successful economical plans that save my house and my job. He has great believe in god and his fate . I am so thankful the gad about the president Barack .
    All in all. These line and all the pages didn't enough to give BARAK OBAMA its achieves . I seeing him as a rescuer of America in its critical problems .he from the past until now believe in America as a great nation still has its global role as super power nation.

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    Default Re: ple correct my essay about Barack Hussein Obama

    Barack Hussein Obama




    For in many past years until nowadays now, the legend of American Presidents were shows showing there as a white and powerful leaders. Why this idea spread among Americans .it because the idea of been Blacks whom weren’t black people aren't smart and powerful enough to run a country . African Americans were have viewed as less people class because of the color of their skin. In 2008, Barack Obama was has elected President of the United States which making makes him the first black president in U.S.A history. I will discuss how makes a change and if America can accept him as our first black great leader.
    If I were u I will change the last sentence
    For that, there are some changes which Barack does

    Sarah ^_^
    watch ur English

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    Default Re: ple correct my essay about Barack Hussein Obama

    Quote Originally Posted by mouhamad View Post
    For many past years until nowadays, the legend of American Presidents were shows there as a white and powerful leaders.

    I don't really understand what you mean to say there. Perhaps:
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    From the beginning of this country until Barack Hussein Obama was sworn in, all the Presidents have been white males.

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    Default Re: ple correct my essay about Barack Hussein Obama

    For the second sentence, perhaps:
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    Why had no black (African American) previously been elected President?


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    Smile Re: ple correct my essay about Barack Hussein Obama

    thanks a lot and i will take what you said in my mind

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    Quote Originally Posted by mouhamad View Post
    Why this idea spread among Americans .it because the idea of been Blacks whom weren’t smart and powerful enough to run a country . African Americans were viewed as less people class because of the color of their skin.

    Why was a black man (African American) never elected President before?



    Since that could easily be the subject of an essay itself, I suggest eliminating that from this one.



    Quote Originally Posted by mouhamad View Post
    In 2008, Barack Obama was elected President of the United States which making him the first black president in U.S.A history.


    In 2008, Barack Obama was elected President of the United States, making him the first black President in US history.


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