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Essay Topic:- Do you think there should be compulsory military training for young adults in your country
Protecting the country in which we live is national duty for each person who belongs to this country. At the same time, the differences in the abilities ought to be taken
on theinto account. The question arises, therefore, as to whether the military training should be mandatory for Saudi youth.
ought toshould/had better harness/recruit young adults, depending on the field in which they do well. Saudi youth, as any youth, have different abilities and characters ,. Therefore, forcing them ininto the domain of military training will not succeed/achieve beneficial results. What is more, carrying a gun is not the merely method for a country to be protected. Having adults who accomplish success in many different fields can be a deterrent for enemies not to attack myour/the country. This is comparable to the organs of human body ,: each one of these organs has specific process to achieve but together they protect the body from the viruses.
On the other hand, the patriotism, which is the love for your country and loyalty towards it, can be an incentive for many Saudi young people to accept the idea of forcing the military training. Also, it can be an experience for one to face the hardships of life. It is well-known that in the military life, young people
facecope with many difficult situations which teach them, in some cases, how to be serious and successful in their work lives.
Summing up/In conlusion/All in all, the advantages of voluntary military training are far outweigh the disadvantages, from my point of view, because while we are capable to protect our country by achieving success in any field in which we work, there is no necessary of the compulsory military training.
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