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There are several issues with your paper:
1. Some parts are not comprehensible
2. Run-on sentences
3. Difficult to read
The good things, however, are:
1. I can sense your sarcasm and humor in the narrative.
2. You're very opinionated and perceptive of your surroundings
3. I would like for you to revise this article so we may all enjoy it.
Overall, your article needs heavy revision, but you've done a great job so far!