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    Hello everybody,
    Can you help me please?
    Our tutor asks us to read any article, and then we have to describe and evaluate the form.
    My problems I don't know how to describe and evaluate either the form or content.
    Can you give me some ideas or suggestion please?
    I have submitted it on Sunday. For that reason I need your help.

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    This is the article which I have to describe and evaluate its form:

    CAUSES OF SUICIDE

    The usual method of studying causes of suicide is through a "psychological postmortem", in which information used to establish a profile of the dead person is gathered from several sources about the individual's background and the events leading up to the suicide.

    METHODOLOGICAL PROBLEMS IN STUDYING CAUSES

    There are many problems encountered in attempting to study the causes of suicide:
    •Information has to be gleaned months or years after the suicide has occurred and may therefore be inadequate and inaccurate.
    •The difficulty of using parents or siblings as informants because it is likely to be distressing for parents to answer questions about their dead son or daughter.

    BACKGROUND FACTORS

    Family Background

    Broken homes
    It is well established that adults who kill themselves often come from broken homes or unhappy families. Family disruption, by death, separation, or divorce, is common among young suicides. Moreover, the prevalence of suicide is related to the degree of geographical mobility and family disruption found in these societies. For example, the lowest suicide rate was found in North Sudan, where there was a structure of close Moslem family units; on the other hand, the highest suicide rate was found in the Indian reservation where there was a lack of family stability.

    Family History of Psychiatric Disorder and Suicidal Behavior
    Psychiatric disorder in family members might contribute to a young person's suicide in any one of several ways. First, there may be a genetic predisposition to depression or other serious mental disorders. Second, living with depressed relatives may mean that the young person lacks affections and feels rejected. Third, a depressive disorder in a parent or older sibling might serve as a model for the individual, encouraging the adoption of a morbid or hopeless attitude. Finally, an adolescent may find it intolerable living with a parent or sibling with a major psychiatric disorder.

    Psychiatric Disorders
    Depression, excessive fears or school refuse

    Physical Disorders
    Although several studies have suggested that only rarely a major contributory factor in adolescent suicide attempters have problems with their physical health such as asthma, fits and tonsillitis.

    Previous Suicide Attempts
    Anyone who has made a previous attempt at harming himself or herself is always considered at high risk of another attempt. The previous attempts are more common among females than males.


    Intellectual Level
    There has been very little investigation of the intelligence of children and adolescents who commit suicide. The appraisal of the hopelessness of a situation by young people and the planning of a fatal attempt may require considerable intellectual ability.

    WHY HAS SUICIDE BECOME MORE COMMON AMONG YOUNG PEOPLE?

    Changes in the Social Environment
    There is no doubt that the social environment of young people has undergone vast changes during the past three decades. One change has been a reduction in family ties. Loss of family supports is becoming more common and often occurs at an early age.

    Greater Acceptability of Suicide as an Option
    A further factor that might have influenced attitudes to suicide is the increasingly free discussion of the topic in the media. People who have entertained suicidal ideas, which are common among young people, but who would not normally have carried out a suicidal act, may be encouraged to act on these ideas because of the media reports.

    Increased Use of Medication and Drugs
    Increased prescribing of psychotropic medicines might contribute to an increase in suicide because of the resulting relatively low thresholds to taking drugs to deal with stress.
    Drug abuse among the young has also become very much more common in recent years. This has contributed to the increase in suicidal deaths, because of two factors. The first is that drug addiction often leads to social disintegration and depression. The second is that deaths from overdoses involving illicit drugs are common.

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    Hi again

    I have done the evaluation of form for that article, but my tutor said my evaluation is poor

    This is what I have written

    EVALUATION
    FORM:
    The style of the chapter is fine. There is an introduction for each topic that draws our attention to the topic itself. The ideas are well organized. The writer puts the factors in order and explains them fulfilly and he puts hi s ideas in sequences. In another words, his explanation for factors is excellent. The language is used easy and understandable. The writer performs his goals and states them clearly

    Could you give me some ideas or suggestions to improve and develop my evaluation?

    Thanks in advance

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    Quote Originally Posted by fajr
    Hi again

    I have done the evaluation of form for that article, but my tutor said my evaluation is poor

    This is what I have written

    EVALUATION
    FORM:
    The style of the chapter is fine. There is an introduction for each topic that draws our attention to the topic itself. The ideas are well organized. The writer puts the factors in order and explains them fulfilly and he puts hi s ideas in sequences. In another words, his explanation for factors is excellent. The language is used easy and understandable. The writer performs his goals and states them clearly

    Could you give me some ideas or suggestions to improve and develop my evaluation?

    Thanks in advance
    I agree with your tutor. You seem to have the basic idea but do not express it. The style of the chapter is fine. This sentence does nothing but take up space. It does not say anything. What style, why does it appeal to you, how is the article segmented, how does the author seperate the various components of the research and how does he link the whole package together. Print it out, use different colors to highlight different components, link the thread going through the article.

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    I have rewritten the description and the evaluation of form. I'd like to tell me your opinion before I submit to my tutor. If there is any mistake please inform me.

    Thanks


    Description
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    The basic format for an outline uses an alternating series of numbers and letters, indented accordingly, to indicate levels of importance. Here is an example of an outline on a paper about causes of suicide.

    OUTLINE
    I. Notion: The usual method of studying causes of suicide is through a "psychological postmortem".

    II. BACKGROUND FACTORS
    1) Family Background
    • Broken homes
    • Family History of Psychiatric Disorder and Suicidal Behavior.
    2) Psychiatric Disorders
    3) Physical Disorders
    4) Previous Suicide Attempts
    5) Intellectual Level

    III. WHY HAS SUICIDE BECOME MORE COMMON AMONG YOUNG PEOPLE?
    1) Changes in the Social Environment
    2) Greater Acceptability of Suicide as an Option
    3) Increased Use of Medication and Drugs

    IV. CONCLUSION

    NOTES

    The title of the chapter is written at the top of the page

    The notion is stated in the first section, which is the introduction.
    The body follows the introduction, and breaks down the points the author wishes to make.
    Each body paragraph has the same basic structure.
    There is Roman numeral for each main ideas that the writer has about his topic, or the main points that he wants to make.
    Under each Roman numeral, there are numerical numbers down at the left side of the page.
    Next to each number, there are the facts or information that supports that main idea.
    Note that some section have subdivisions, others do not, depending on the demands of the chapter.
    The main topic, subtopics, and details are begun with capital letters.
    There is a period after each division letter or number.
    The conclusion is restated the notion, and never introduce new material.


    Evaluation
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    First of all, the writer begins with an attention grabbing information.

    Then, there is an introduction which is three to four sentences long. The introduction with a general statement, and with each sentence that follows get more and more specific until we get to the last sentence, which is a clearly stated notion. This notion states the point of the chapter. The notion is like an umbrella which spans this chapter, including all major points found in the chapter.

    I think a conclusion should remind the reader of the points that have been made in the chapter, and the concluding sentence should grab the attention of us.

    According to this chapter, the conclusion brings closure to us and the reverses the order of what the writer has written in the introduction. However, the concluding statement sums up what we would have the readers remember about the causes of suicide.

    Last but not least, I think that the outline of chapter is good and the information is organized.

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    what are subtopic's?

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    Quote Originally Posted by chany12 View Post
    what are subtopic's?
    No. Say:
    What are subtopics?
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    Quote Originally Posted by fajr View Post
    I have rewritten the description and the evaluation of form. I'd like to tell me your opinion before I submit to my tutor. If there is any mistake please inform me.
    I have rewritten the description and the evaluation of form. I'd like you to give me your opinion of it before I submit it to my tutor. If there are any mistakes please tell me what they are.


    Quote Originally Posted by fajr View Post
    The basic format for an outline uses an alternating series of numbers and letters, indented accordingly, to indicate levels of importance. Here is an example of an outline on a paper about causes of suicide.
    Put the in front of suicide.

    I think your outline was written better than the article.

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