Is this sentence phrased properly?

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motico

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Is this sentence phrased properly? I wasn't sure about "repair".


'Granting the citizens their just rights is a repair of a long-lasting historical evil'
 

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I would remove the word just and rephrase it a little, so it would look like this:

Granting the citizens their rights will repair the long-lasting historical evil.
 

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I accept your correction. Thank you very much!
 

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Not a teacher.

"Redress" in a better word than "repair."
 
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