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    Default 5) Saad & Suad - 6) Class Room

    Hi friends, today I have another tale which needs to be checked. I hope that you will do it. Thanks.

    Saad and Suad

    Saad and Suad are active students. Saad is reading Almudala book while Suad is memorizing a Sura of the Holy Quran. Saad read his book while Suad memorized the Sura. Now they are playing and running in the garden. Playing with a ball and running behind it. Saad and Suad are successful because they study in studying time and play in the playing time.

    Class Room

    My class room is beautiful. It has a wide door and windows that the sun and air enter of it. Everything in my class room is clean and arranged. The students, seats, walls, tiles and roofs are clean. There is in front of us a blackboard which we write on it with chalks. I like my class room as my home and also like my classmates like my brothers.

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    Default Re: 5) Saad & Suad - 6) Class Room

    **Neither a teacher nor a native speaker.**

    Quote Originally Posted by atchan View Post

    Saad and Suad

    Saad and Suad are active students. Saad is reading an/the Almudala book while Suad is memorizing a Sura of the Holy Quran. Saad read his book while Suad memorized the Sura. - why do you write it twice? Now they are playing and running in the garden. Playing with a ball and running behind it. Saad and Suad are successful because they study in the studying time and play in the playing time.
    When you say "in the playing time", you should also say "in the studying time".

    Class Room

    My class room is beautiful. It has a wide door and windows so that the sun and air enter of (through?) it. Everything in my class room is clean and arranged. The students, seats, walls, tiles and roofs are clean. There is a blackboard in front of us on which we write on it with chalk. I like my class room as much as my home and also (like) my classmates as much as my brothers.
    I'm not very sure if my last corrections (the last sentences) are really okay.
    I hope that the rest is acceptable (both your text and my other corrections.)

    P.S. Let's hope some other members will say something as well.

    Cheers!

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    Default Re: 5) Saad & Suad - 6) Class Room

    Thank you Nightmare85. Now I have updated it. I think there aren't any more mistakes.

    Saad and Suad

    Saad and Suad are active students. Saad is reading the Almudala book while Suad is memorizing a Sura of the Holy Quran. They finished their homework. Now they are playing and running in the garden. Playing with a ball and running behind it. Saad and Suad are successful because they study in the studying time and play in the playing time.

    Class Room

    My class room is beautiful. It has a wide door and windows so that the sun and air enter through it. Everything in my class room is clean and arranged. The students, seats, walls, tiles and roofs are clean. There is a blackboard in front of us on which we write with chalk. I like my class room as much as my home and also my classmates as much as my brothers.

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    Default Re: 5) Saad & Suad - 6) Class Room

    Quote Originally Posted by atchan View Post
    Thank you Nightmare85. Now I have updated it. I think there aren't any more mistakes.

    Saad and Suad

    Saad and Suad are active students. Saad is reading the Almudala book while Suad is memorizing a Sura of the Holy Quran. They have finished their homework. Now they are playing and running in the garden. They are playing with a ball and running behind it. Saad and Suad are successful because they study in the studying time and play in the playing time.

    Class Room

    My class room classroom is beautiful. It has a wide door and windows so that the sun and air enter through it through which the sun and air enter. Everything in my class room classroom is clean and arranged tidy. The students (the students are clean?!), seats, walls, tiles and roofs ceiling are clean. There is a blackboard at the front on which we write with chalk. I like my class room classroom as much as my home, and also my classmates as much as my brothers.
    See above. As I've marked, I found it a little strange that among the list of clean attributes of the classroom, you included the students! If you're inside a classroom, it doesn't have a roof, it has a ceiling. A roof is on the outside of a building.

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    Default Re: 5) Saad & Suad - 6) Class Room

    Thank you very much emsr2d2.

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    Default Re: 5) Saad & Suad - 6) Class Room

    Quote Originally Posted by emsr2d2 View Post
    See above. As I've marked, I found it a little strange that among the list of clean attributes of the classroom, you included the students! If you're inside a classroom, it doesn't have a roof, it has a ceiling. A roof is on the outside of a building.
    The students (the students are clean?!), seats, walls, tiles and roofs ceiling are clean.
    Is it funny, so how can I do it? I mean that the students are clean not dirty. But I have added them among the solid things. Please arrange them as much as you can.

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    Default Re: 5) Saad & Suad - 6) Class Room

    I am not a teacher, but I'll tell you what I think.

    If you really want to say that the students are clean, you could separate them from the "solid things", for example, instead of
    Everything in my classroom is clean and tidy. The students, seats, walls, tiles and ceiling are clean.
    you could write,

    "The students are clean, and so is the classroom: the seats, the walls, the tiles, and the ceiling are all clean."

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