See above for amendments. If you have any queries, please post them!Here is very important letter that I need to submit to Office of Student Financial Aid. As English is my second language, I may make a mistakes while I write this kind of letter so please help me out by correcting grammer mistakes. Thank you in advance for your willing to help me.
Dear Office of Student Financial Aid,
I am writing this letter to appeal the suspension of my financial aid grant for the 2010 fall semester. The grounds on which I wish to appeal are that I have been making satisfactory
resultprogress towards my educational goal. To start with, in 2008, I hadgraduated in Biomedical Science from the Cambridge Biomedical Careers program through Just-A-start and Bunker Hill Community College. In the spring of 2010, I havecompleted two classes with excellent results, and I am currently taking classes as a full-time student, in which I am doing perfectlyvery well.
Unfortunately, during the spring of 2005 (are you sure that 2005 is correct?), I
hadenrolled in a total of four classes but did not meet the minimum standards for academic progress which has caused my financial aid to be denied for my next enrollment for the 2010 fall semester. In fact, I failed to completedcomplete my educationthe classes due to a family emergency. My father, who was living in Ethiopia wasdied while I was activelyattending at BHCC. By theAt that time, I wasn't in a position to deal ingwith stress and school ing.
Also, during the summer of 2008 and fall of 2009, I was
full time employeein full-time employment. I had a very tediousdemanding work schedule (12 hour shifts) which caused me to be in the office more than at home. During office hours, I was unable to work on my class assignments and by the time I would getgot home, it would bewas late. and I would be in the process ofhad to get tingready for the next day and try ingto make uptime withfor my patient(do you mean she was sick, so she was a "patient"?) mom. I soon realized that returning to school along with working longer hours was more difficult than I thought and that I may have put too much on my plate thattaken on more than I could actually handle.
Although my financial situation is challenging at the moment, there is no doubt in my mind that I will succeed at Bunker Hill Community College.
Please know thatSchool is of great importance to me and I have come up with a new plan for the following semester to manage my time and school work. I believe it will be very effective for me and I will bring all of my grades and cumulative grade point average up to, or above, BHCC’s acceptable academic standard policy.
The steps I am going to take to assure successful academic progress in the future:
• Obtain a tutor for the classes I find difficult.* I have made myself familiar with the tutoring center on campus.
• Meet with each of my instructors
ato talk with them about what they believe will make me a better student in their class.
• Go to the scheduled office hours (you can't "go to office hours" so I'm not sure what you mean) of each instructor when I am having difficulty with the class material.
• Develop a relationship with other students to form study groups.
• Go to class on time as scheduled.
My goal is to complete an Associates Degree in Biomedical Science. Without student financial aid, I will be financially unable to complete my goal.
Please knowI can assure you that I am extremely focused on my future and my dedication to my education is paramount. I am aware that I am allowed to submit an appeal once in regards toagainst a Financial Aid determination only once induring my educational experiencetime at Bunker Hill Community College. This is the only appeal I will ever make, due to the fact that I am extremely determined to rise above the minimum requirements for Financial Aid acceptance and good standing at BHCC. Please allow me a second chance to prove that I can be a model student and achieve academic excellence.
If you have any questions or need any additional information, please contact me at EMAIL REMOVED - Send PM to This User Instead or 617 000 0000.
I thank you for your consideration
toof this appeal.
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